Amit Ray

Rookie - 127 Points (United Kingdom)

Comments about Amit Ray

  • Rookie Lenore Lee (9/22/2011 7:54:00 PM)

    Your poetry is so descriptive and sooo amazing. Thanks for being so inspiring to poets everywhere!

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  • Rookie Ahmed Khaled (9/1/2011 2:19:00 PM)

    what a sublime beauty which could grasp us and what a profound feeling which we could grasp when we go deep into your poetry, o dove of love, thanks alot /\ yours: ph.d: a.khaled

  • Rookie - 127 Points Allemagne Roßmann (8/20/2011 9:16:00 AM)

    From: Asiimwe Simon (Uganda ;)
    To: Aamit Rothschild
    Date Time: 8/18/2011 4: 48: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: i liked your poem


  • Rookie - 127 Points Allemagne Roßmann (8/20/2011 9:06:00 AM)

    From: Heather Wilkins (cincinnati United States; Female; 54)
    To: Aamit Rothschild
    Date Time: 8/18/2011 10: 07: 00 PM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: poem

    I have read several of your poems, and enjoyed reading each. You are very talented writer. Study haiku's a little bit more. write one in english and then translate it to german. okay... good luck... heather

  • Rookie - 127 Points Allemagne Roßmann (8/20/2011 8:59:00 AM)

    From: Diana Kauke (: P Latvia; Female; 14)
    To: Aamit Rothschild
    Date Time: 8/19/2011 2: 16: 00 PM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: Re: KOISHII-

    Hey, nice to meet you! ^^ I really like your poems! ^^

    Best wishes,

  • Rookie - 127 Points Allemagne Roßmann (8/12/2011 8:53:00 AM)

    From: Colin J... (Dalgety Bay, Fife, Scotland United Kingdom; Male; 62)
    To: Aamit Rothschild
    Date Time: 8/12/2011 8: 19: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: An Apple

    Cannot beleive that the person who wrot 'An apple' wrote this request...

  • Rookie - 127 Points Allemagne Roßmann (8/8/2011 6:19:00 AM)

    From: Luke Easter (Cleveland, Ohio United States; Male; 61)
    To: Aamit Rothschild
    Date Time: 8/7/2011 9: 09: 00 PM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: Re: An Apple

    11 R Principle to write a poem.

    1) Read-) not just the written word but your surroundings via five senses.

    2) Retain-) write them down whether interesting or not.

    3) Restructure-) now throw out that which does not send a message you want to convey. Putting thoughts in an order that tell a poetic story.

    4) Rhyme-) here's the tricky part. Sometimes a sentence will become fragmented but that's OK when writing rhyme poetry. Have your dictionary and thesaurus ready.

    5) Relate-) in a written form. Poetry!

    6) Resistance-) will come from Satan as his fiery darts try to divert your attention from the task at hand to all your failures and misdeeds of the past
    7) Release-) the spirit by standing tall in your thought process being firm in a conviction for whatever you're writing.

    8) Rushing-) is the last thing you'll want to do.

    9) Relax-) take your time. What's the hurry?

    10) Read-) once satisfied with the work, have another look at it. See if the message you want to get across is what they feel as well.

    11) Remember-) in Christ Jesus, God sent His best. So why go back to Him with anything less?

  • Rookie - 127 Points Allemagne Roßmann (8/8/2011 6:16:00 AM)

    From: R. G. Bell (Myrtle Beach United States; Male; 59)
    To: Aamit Rothschild
    Date Time: 8/7/2011 2: 03: 00 PM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: Re: An Apple

    I suggest you work on your spelling.

  • Rookie - 127 Points Allemagne Roßmann (8/5/2011 3:06:00 PM)

    From: Surabhi Gupta (Barddhaman India; Female; 15)
    To: Aamit Rothschild
    Date Time: 8/5/2011 9: 40: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: comments

    which languages do u dont no? ? ? ?

  • Rookie - 127 Points Allemagne Roßmann (8/2/2011 10:24:00 PM)

    From: Isobel Byrd Billingsley (Fustérouau France; Female; 69)
    To: Aamit Rothschild
    Date Time: 8/2/2011 10: 04: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: Your request for a comment/criticism of the poem 'a german racist washerwoman'

    Hello there, Although I appreciate your strong feelings and the emotions expressed I feel your choice of format unfortunate.Its length and density, its uncertain rythms, changing line lengths, the copious detail of the character and the situation make the poem inaccessible for the reader. In my opinion your subject would make a very telling and accessible short story but written as you have done it is offputting, by being too long and verbose, to the reader.The bitterness could be expressed much more simply and in a shorter poetic format, the repetition of the line 'a german racist washerwoman ', which is good, would be more impressive coming after shorter less dense stanzas.Economy of vocabulary often has a much more telling effect on the reader than too much detailed explanation.Also readers do not like to be hectored...leading them or suggesting to them your feelings is always the better appreciated.Hope this is of interest, remember it is only my opinion.

Best Poem of Amit Ray

****~in Sunderbans~****

Your Name: Amit Ray

Title of Poem: In Sunderbans

The Body of the Poem:

In Sunderbans where tigers roar
Mangroves dense vast surroundings explore
Black stripes sniffed on orange flesh
for succour where to- ever his grouses justified refesh
Danger lurks cautiously guarding his lair, mother Nature in furore!

A timid deer`s gossamer dreams in his patient mouth
That`s how the law defined-somebody`s sunrise and somebody else`s sunset so couth
A second day fuel with a succulent buffalo, a third day duel with a crocodile in nesh
In ...

Read the full of ****~in Sunderbans~****



The augury of him in Crimea was so
That Ekaterina said she was tired of sandwiches
But I did have black tea, black Latvian bread with her black Ikra near Black Sea
Hundreds of kilometres from Kiev and from Moscow in Odessa where heresy breaches

I beated her wings in no confinement, in no vituperation
She flew flower to flower to no destination

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