I see a talent here, although I didn't read one poem that I felt was really finished. I hope you are reading poetry- maybe some publications like American Poetry Review and Poetry. Keep writing...I'm sincere about believing in your talent.
Fade Into Me
I listen to the song you do and think that possibly it's playing in your brain at the same time. I listen to it and I lie down and feel as though you yourself are the one comforting me and sitting on the bed