Treasure Island

Blossom Mist

(24 February 1978 / India)

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  • Richard Beevor (4/25/2014 4:22:00 PM)

    lovely poem, like the story and the sadness of love

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  • Anne Havell (3/6/2014 5:20:00 AM)

    This poem is heavy in meaning and rich In imagery. I've rated it high though I think it could be improved if you maintained a consistent rhyming scheme throughout then the poem would flow more freely without jarring stops. The lines has a strong internal rhythm and this work well. I hope you do not think I am being unnecessarily critical but in my opinion it would be worth putting in a little extra work as basically you've written a very good poem. Well done.

Your's Truly

I walk with you like a shadow that never leaves you.
In the sun and thru the storm, I will be with you all day long.
A smile to share wtih a word of care.
An ear to listen when you talk, a shoulder to lean when you stop.
I will be your faith when you pray, a ray of hope on a dark day.
A smile on your lips is all I wish, My love for you is sealed with a kiss.
Like the warmth of sun on the snow, and as the soothing moon glows.
I will be with you my love, as the angels look on us from above.

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