louis sacre croix
(2/24/2005 1:35:00 PM)
I liked your sixth poem, very much.
You need to stop worrying so much about rhyming or not and telling a story and try to paint the picture of what you are feeling.
Once you paint the picture in your mind onto the page and feel it right. It should look like a picture and not just an essay or a bunch of words.
Keep going I think you know where to head and that's a positive :)
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- It's more of a song lyric.
Please let me know how I can improve it.
Changing words etc,
Thanks in advice!
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