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Michael Conner Male, 59, United States (4/16/2013 11:00:00 PM)

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Lance....I love this piece, ...good job. I almost hate to even be so bold as mess with it,
but since you asked for tips on getting the meter to play out I gave it a go.
Just my take on a different cadence and flow without changing the content.
Good luck on the assignment, man......

What Will It Be?

“What will it be Mac?” The bartender asks.
I sit and ponder while I draw on my cigar, (I sit and ponder and enjoy my cigar)
So many choices are there from his flasks. (so many choices are there in his flasks)
They range from the mundane to the bizarre. (they range from mundane, out to the bizarre)

Do I fancy a Merlot from France,
Or fine scotch from the Highland,
Perhaps I should leave up to chance, (should I leave it to chance)
Or tea from long-island. (or choose tea from Long Island)

Shall I chase the green fairy,
Or wait for the white lightning to strike? (or wait for white lightning to strike)
If I do things could get hairy, (if I do things'd get hairy)
I can think of nothing I’d dislike. (for there's nothing I'd dislike)

I sense that the answer is near, (I'm beginning to sense that the answer is near)
I’ll have one whiskey, one bourbon, one beer (I'll just have one whiskey, one bourbon, one beer)

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