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Nirode Ray Male, 54, United States (2/23/2014 3:50:00 PM)

Hi Everyone,

I visited St.Petersburg, FL during the New Year eve time. I loved that place, its beach, its downtown and its surreal ambience. I wrote a poem on St. Pete beach to show my adulation. I am posting it here. I hope you guys would like it.
Regards
Nirode Ray

The Ocean Bells!
(By Nirode Ray)

It is before dawn
the sun is still in bed
at the shore end
the sky lightens up
and the sun pops out again.
The seagull looks docile
water remains placid
the girl stands there,
her curly brown hair
in a cool ocean breeze.

It is skin dip hot
the noon wears no cap
after a glass of ale
I take a fizzy nap.
Water is warm now
sand turns white to grey
that seagull remains there
waiting for his prey.

Evening falls slow
the sun starts packing down
a lonely dolphin, off shore,
flaps back to her town.
the sky looks foamy
light changes its hue
a series of blurred visions,
like Monet’s Impressions
hover on soft blue.

The night hops
it's all deep dark
only a lighthouse blinks
at a distant far.
I look up to heaven
I want to see her face
the ocean bells,
a tiny magic spell
shuts my eyes close
I lay down on St.Pete bay
my memory fades away
and the ocean allures me again.

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  • Atheanga Tiomaint (3/18/2014 7:21:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    A beautiful poem. You have capture the experience perfectly. Well-done!

  • ibrahim Ayagi (2/26/2014 6:17:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    you already are a great poet. I must confess i love this poem. Please lets rub mind on poetry.

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