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Adam M. Snow Adam M. Snow Male, 26, United States (8/6/2013 8:31:00 PM)

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For Whom the Hour Tolls
By: Adam M. Snow

For whom the hour tolls,
beyond the smoke and mirrors;
the speeding of devoted souls,
perching, like a somber crow-
on time itself, afraid to go.

Entranced by a tune of many flaws,
the child we are, like an ant in a labyrinth.
A victim to its own laws,
aging with time not the hour;
a life like a gentle flower.

Like sands from an hourglass, we fall,
with no purpose, but that of our own.
In our dreams we see it all,
the tragedy of this world has befallen,
the great of man has fallen.

For love, we do not mourn the loss of man,
in the wake of time itself.
We mourn the lies that once did stand,
in the hopes of what sorrow may bring,
a tragedy of a king.

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  • Jefferson Carter (8/6/2013 9:30:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    Adam, pretty awful. The meter is all screwed up and some of your phrases are clumsy. Why keep writing like this? Why nor pick up a book of good contemporary poetry and read that? ANYONE can write this kind of sententious, trite, amateurish stuff. Don't you want to become a better poet?

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    • Adam M. Snow (8/7/2013 12:35:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

      I have been writing poetry for 10 years, everyone has their own unique style and this is mine. Poetry isn't about it being 100% perfect, it's about being unique and expressing it in your own ways. Min ... more

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