Poetics and Poetry Discussion
Alice Vedral Rivera
(10/17/2013 8:26:00 AM)
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I do not think it is grandiose. I think it is a a poem about the realization and then affirmation of the fact that 1 person (in this case, a woman who previously believed she was powerless) has the power to make a change. There are some grammatical errors (like 'me who' when it should be 'I who' and missing the verb 'is' in the 5th line) and the poem could be tighter, but I like the concept.Replies for this message:
Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr
(10/16/2013 2:21:00 AM)
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K, I have to concur with Jefferaon, ...While i'm reading your poem i'm getting the time-tunnel express back to the intros of some of my favorite saturday morning super hero shows...A bit ornate and sermonesque(imo) ...and its " bear" , not " bare" that you want, (I hope) ...Don'rt be stubborn...Put down your pen, go to a library or bookstore and spend some quality time ensconced in the works of your contemporary poets. Trust me...noone that is considered well written and established became so by not reading, learning and experimenting first, in that order...Good Luck, young lady ~FjR~
(10/15/2013 4:29:00 PM)
K, a little grandiose, error-riddled, and cliched. if you're not going to start reading those poets I suggested, why post your efforts here? You're not going to improve on your own. Nothing coming in, nothing going out is an apt motto for what you're doing.
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