Teen Poetry and Discussions

Erm, perhaps if any of you find time you could read some of my poems and maybe even comment. It'd be really appreciated ^^

Okay I'm gonna put in here the first one, if you have any interest read part one and two, even if you don't read anyway. You may like one more than the other. Feel free to comment :)

Waves from Melbourne Part 1 (Not as innocent, not as pure)

The waves used to hit the shore lightly
They would glimmer and shimmer nightly
They used to crash so brilliantly
Shining a nice pure blue so beautifully.
Now the waves have gotten rough,
They crash the shore really rough,
Weighing down on me it hits,
It hits like tons of bricks.
But you’re surrounded by waves,
You’re also haunted by ocean graves,
So they will crash over you, harder than me
And they will float back out to sea.
When they come in and go out,
You hear them as they cry out,
But at least I hear them, and nothing more
At least I can see them touch the shore.
So there’s one thing I know for sure,
You are not innocent, not as pure.
As the waves that hit the shore.

hey everyone would you please rateand comment on my poems and in return i will do the some

Hey everyone :) I am creating a series of poems called " Waves from Melbourne' so far I have added parts one, two and three. Please read them and enjoy :)

hey guys please read my new poem ABOUT YOU WHAT I HATE :) :) love ya[3

hello everybody i'm a student and just written a poem and comment on it please! ! ! ! i promise your read mine i'll read yours :) thank you [3

Hi everyone
Please would you both rate and comment on my poems?Thanks :)

Hello! I'm a home school student, and I'm doing a poetry project. I need a poem that has alliteration in it. Could someone please tell me what " alliteration" means?Thanks!

What do you think?

Oath to dreams

A soothing voice is hard to embrace
When you feel undeserved of its grace
The sweetness of her fruit is hard to taste
From guilt embedded within your shame
Lies upon lies built your heavenly estate
For her to enjoy and believe that her fate
Lie within your lies and truth distorted
And reality is a scenery she surely hates
So we sit and imagine a hopeful dream
As dreams are surely better than what awaits

Syed Mowla

Tell me what you think!
Visions

I close my eyes and invision a place where I'm in your arms and the world spins faster around us while we stay still. The rain falls down but we don't hear a sound. Not the war could tear us apart. The floor could break giving way to hell. But my eyes are still staring trapped in your gaze. You cast a shadow on me that makes me tremble with puzzlement. I feel safe. Your skin is warm and your eyes longing for something more. You whisper something that stops me dead in my tracks. I look and match your gaze as we lock and stare into relazation of each others souls for the first time.