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  • William Blake Beckett (2/22/2012 10:40:00 PM) Post reply

    http: //www.poemhunter.com/poem/man-in-the-sand/

  • Morgana Hale (2/18/2012 10:05:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    Hi! This is a poem I wrote for a story I'm working on... Please let me know what you think!

    You hide behind a smile,
    You /act/ free of care,
    I see the fear in your eyes,
    On your face I see pain,
    I know I can’t help,
    It makes me want to cry.
    I love you,
    I always will.
    I see your pain,
    That emptiness,
    That just won’t fill.
    The scars on your past,
    Match the scars on my soul.
    With out the other,
    Neither is whole.
    Together, no act is needed,
    Together, no warning is heeded.
    Take my hand,
    Fellow forsaken,
    Do not act with me,
    Just be.
    When will you see?
    You and I are the same.
    I watch,
    As the day goes by,
    Know I am here.
    Take off The Act,
    You needn’t be strong,
    Weather you notice or not,
    Emotions are not wrong,
    My shoulder is here,
    For you to cry on.

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    • Silver2black TG (3/19/2012 10:49:00 AM) Post reply

      I love the style, It just needs 2 be a little more poetic and stronger, Other than that very GOOD Rhyming I love it! : D!

  • Colleen Dawson (2/15/2012 5:23:00 PM) Post reply

    Tis a poem: D

    SKY-
    Sorrow hanging high
    Kind of despare lost in the air
    Youndering beyond your place may end in sorrow and despare

  • Harshvardhan Ramachandran (2/11/2012 6:12:00 PM) Post reply

    Hello to everyone, I've been posting for 2 years, sporadically in 2009 and for a while in 2010 and have picked it up at the end of 2011 and into 2012. I have posted about 15 poems at the link below. Some of the old Poems might not feel too professional, The more recent work is pretty interesting, I hope you'll feel the same
    Any possible, feedback and critique will be most appreciated. I'd do the same if anyone needs some critique. Thank you.

    http: //www.poemhunter.com/harshvardhan-ramachandran/

    I also have a blog where I post more of my Poems, essays, articles and opinions, which is updated more regularly. Thanks for checking them out.

    http: //www.portraitofideas.blogspot.com/

    I write about Love, peace, equality, The Future, occasionally love and much more..

  • Chettur Aishwarya Shrivastav (2/8/2012 2:21:00 AM) Post reply

    http: //www.poemhunter.com/chettur-aishwarya-shrivastav/

    hey this is aishwarya shrivastav from India. i am a school going girl.. i have been writing, when i was 13 yrs. old...

    plz do read my poems and do comment..

  • Zibele Mrasi (2/7/2012 7:50:00 AM) Post reply

    I just started writting this year so I'm not really sure if I'm on point with poetry and I'm not sure which poems I like to write or who am I as a poet but I'm sure that you will enjoy one or two of my poems so hala at them and what I need the most is you comment thank you

  • ~Deana ~ Dotterweich (2/6/2012 10:49:00 AM) Post reply

    Hey Please check out my poems and post a comment/rate them... :) Please.

  • Sun And Moon (1/26/2012 7:09:00 AM) Post reply

    Hey Everyone!
    I am new to the site and I'd be really happy if you guys do me a favour and check out my poems on my page please!
    And tell me if they can be improved or anything :)

  • Rex Copperfield (1/25/2012 10:47:00 PM) Post reply

    hey every body do me the honor of reading/commenting on my poems so i can get feedback on how to get better im up for even the harshest critic ill return the favor please and thank you

  • Megan Loww (1/24/2012 1:04:00 PM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

    This is my poem about the 9/11 attacks. it is based on a girl who lost her father and based on the day after.
    *please tell me what you think*


    Heaven is never too far.


    My Daddy couldn't be here,
    because he lives so far away.
    But I know he wishes he could be,
    since this is such a special day.
    And though you cannot meet him,
    I wanted you to know.
    All about my daddy,
    and how much he loves me so.
    He loved to tell me stories
    he taught me to ride my bike.
    He surprised me with pink roses,
    and taught me to fly a kite.
    We used to share fudge sundaes,
    and ice cream in a cone.
    And though you cannot see him.
    I'm not standing here alone.
    Cause my daddy's always with me,
    even though we are apart
    I know because he told me,
    he'll forever be in my heart
    I love my daddy very much,
    he's my shining star.
    And if he could, he'd be here,
    but heaven's just too far
    You see he was a firefighter
    and died just this past year
    When airplanes hit the towers
    and taught Americans to fear.
    But sometimes when I close my eyes,
    it's like he never went away.
    I know you're with me Daddy
    believing,
    that heaven is never too far away.

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    • Rachel Frankovich (2/3/2012 12:14:00 PM) Post reply

      P.S. It also wasn't ORIGINALLY written to be about 9/11 and was published a year earlier.

    • Rachel Frankovich (2/3/2012 12:12:00 PM) Post reply

      I'd like to point out that you stole this from a guy who stole this from a women who wrote it about a very special young lady. This isn't yours. It's WORD FOR WORD the same. I hope you take it down an ... more

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