Critiques and Revision
(12/29/2011 12:58:00 PM)
I love the truth and the flow of ideas here. Too much poetry is about the shallow and almost unreal fleeting emotions. This poem has much deeper issues, such as our relation to ego and the way reality is arranged. Enjoyable and humbling to read, nice work! !
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Like a soldier's hard-earned stripes, his cuts
run across his arms, their raised shine standing out.
I am mesmerized by ...