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Ulveena Aitzaz Ulveena Aitzaz Female, 19, Pakistan (8/18/2012 6:12:00 AM)

Little Baby

Little baby don't you cry,
Go to sleep, come on, give it a try.
Close your eyes and got to sleep,
Dream of fairies in your slumber so deep.
I will be right here next to you,
Know, little baby, I love you.
Now close your starry, twinkling eyes,
And you will see glowing fireflies.
I promise you, little baby, when you wake up to the morning light,
You shall get a kiss and a hug very tight.
But for now I shall stroke your silky hair,
And when you wake up, look by your side and you'll find me right here.
So, little baby, don't you cry,
Go to sleep, come on, give it a try.
Close your eyes and go to sleep,
Dream of fairies in your slumber so deep.

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  • Anita Jonker Rookie - 1st Stage (9/12/2012 2:54:00 AM) Post reply

    This made me smile and cheered up my mood. Awesome rhythm and just very sweet well done!

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