hasmukh amathalal

Gold Star - 26,227 Points (17/05/1947 / Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India)

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  • Gold Star - 26,227 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (7/23/2010 7:47:00 PM)

    ate & Time: 7/23/2010 7: 35: 00 AM
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    Poem: 24004619 - All eyes
    Member: Unwritten Soul
    Comment: wow this is so worth to ponder! Everyone may ask 1000 question, anything that God creates can question all of them..and everything make us close to Him if we always think! ..
    That make this poem so worth, stand with it's own value..love it, thanks for sharing

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  • Gold Star - 26,227 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (7/22/2010 4:12:00 AM)

    • 21 Jul
    • I like the intent of the poem here. But many of the lines seemed forced for the rhyme. Writing the meaning through the rhyme will help the contextual flow of the lines. And a stronger internal rhythm to the lines will be accomplished as well. Just a thought. A set rhyme scheme will also set a pace to the music of the rhymes as well. A poet friend// RH Peat on Any aim
    From Ron Peat 21 Jul
    • Interesting rhymes. But I'm not so sure poetry is nice words at all. This is one of big misnomers about writing poetry. Poetry is meant to enflame or move readers toward new concepts, physically, emotionally, & spiritually which means a poem needs internal conflict of some sort in its turning point, which is later conjoined in some way with the opening of the poem, when the closure on the poem is finally made. Stephen Crane's 'black rider' poems from the 1800's are haunting, scary, fearful and fearless. Yet they reveal much about people and various kinds of closed consciousness. (a knell) is a bell ringing for a death, a for whom the bell tolls kind of a thing. I think you mean 'kneel.' I misspell words all the time and I really appreciate it when someone brings it to my attention. I hope you are the same way. a poet friend/RH Peat on A poetic world
    From Ron Peat 21 J

  • Gold Star - 26,227 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (7/22/2010 4:12:00 AM)

    • Flow of musical words from the pen o f poet give message of all kinds! on A real poem
    From T A Ramesh 21 Jul
    • it is all you wrote on A real poem
    From carol 21 Jul
    • All these thing and sometimes anger and rage. Poems, for me are the language of the heart. on A real poem
    From Paddy Martin 21 Jul
    • A THOUGHTFUL POEM WELL WRITTEN! -Raj on A real poem
    From RAJ NANDY 21 Jul
    • methinks you've answered the question, imaginative write... on A real poem
    From wojja fink 21 Jul

  • Gold Star - 26,227 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (7/21/2010 9:31:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 7/21/2010 9: 14: 00 PM
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    Poem: 23992682 - A warm welcome
    Member: Lady Grace
    Comment: You have touched me like high speed wind
    I was flying with emotions and couldn’t find
    It was immense pleasure to hold on in grip
    Tears almost rolled on cheeks but couldn’t weep

    As you closed on to paste the warm welcome
    The whole world seemed to have nearly come
    I was wondering what it was all about
    It was slow whispering and not big shout...

    i like the presentation of this..it is full of sense...brief, short and rhymed is nicer dear than lengthy poem...sometimes, due of too much words, the thought is already lost so, better like this...hope u r fine....very nice presentation...



    Date & Time: 7/21/2010 7: 53: 00 AM
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    Poem: 23987484 - A real poem
    Member: Ken E Hall
    Comment: What is a real poem indeed...you have just wrote one hasmukh, a diifferent slant on poems great idea well put ++++10 regard

  • Gold Star - 26,227 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (7/19/2010 8:28:00 PM)

    ate & Time: 7/19/2010 8: 29: 00 AM
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    Poem: 23941783 - A action to be
    Member: Mark Lewis Berryann
    Comment: The base has to be strong for any good foundation
    No one may prefer to go for or against without any recommendation
    There has to be sincere efforts for calling a day
    You can hold roots with firm commitment to say

    I find value in the entire poem still, the verse copied above was my favorite! A strong poem. Sharing value and understanding of our world!



    Date & Time: 7/19/2010 7: 14: 00 AM
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    Poem: 23951397 - A candle to melt
    Member: David Beckham
    Comment: Very reflective and a poem to take every where with you. Nicely done 10



    Date & Time: 7/19/2010 3: 12: 00 AM
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    Poem: 16893249 - ' Miss ', I really miss#(in 500)
    Member: Kaa.na. Kalyanasundaram
    Comment: Great write. Thanks for sharing; Really I have not missed your pen; with good wishes: Kaa.na.kalyan.

  • Gold Star - 26,227 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (7/18/2010 10:45:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 7/18/2010 9: 51: 00 PM
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    Poem: 23966094 - A princess of heart
    Member: David Beckham
    Comment: this is beautiful. Really enjoyed it



    Date & Time: 7/18/2010 9: 48: 00 PM
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    Poem: 23951282 - A smile from Buddha
    Member: Rajaram Ramachandran
    Comment: One Buddha is not enough to set right this world. How can Buddha smile at the violence spread everywhere?



    Date & Time: 7/18/2010 9: 44: 00 PM
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    Poem: 23938241 - A look at children
    Member: Rajaram Ramachandran
    Comment: Children are gifts from God, as you say, and childless parents can adopt children from orphanage homes. All flowers do not grow in our gardens. Sometime we have to get them from others' gardens.

  • Gold Star - 26,227 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (7/18/2010 9:10:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 7/18/2010 9: 06: 00 PM
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    Poem: 23948453 - A birth of poet
    Member: /Rose Koffin/
    Comment: Very interesting....insightful of the mind...moving...my friend keep writing^^



    Date & Time: 7/18/2010 7: 26: 00 AM
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    Poem: 23959677 - A nice joke
    Member: Rosse Nor
    Comment: What we wish, what we get. Eyes will tell every truth within us and sometimes in our life journey what we get, not what we want. certain aspect of life can't be written by human hand.
    Nice and real story of live.
    10 for you

  • Gold Star - 26,227 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (7/18/2010 6:17:00 AM)

    Date & Time: 7/18/2010 5: 56: 00 AM
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    Poem: 23938241 - A look at children
    Member: Chulsoo Kim
    Comment: Days tiredness go off when you see them playing

    It's happiness. good work



    Date & Time: 7/18/2010 3: 58: 00 AM
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    Poem: 23941783 - A action to be
    Member: Ken E Hall
    Comment: Action all the way aka speaks louder than a thousand words important subject to write about...+++++10.....regards



    Date & Time: 7/18/2010 3: 37: 00 AM
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    Poem: 21872772 - A never ending
    Member: Elena Sandu
    Comment: 'I wish I have some treasure to share
    I searched all over but found no where'
    Well, sir, I can see your treasure
    It feeds me, I'll have a tiny slice
    if you dont mind
    Your poems, I can't measure
    nor explain how good it feels
    to have a bit of share.
    Thank you

  • Gold Star - 26,227 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (7/15/2010 10:25:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 7/15/2010 9: 50: 00 PM
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    Poem: 23820159 - A fear so often
    Member: Greenwolfe 1962
    Comment: This is not one poem, it is two. The first 6 stanzas are incomplete and I would finish them and using the same title rewrite that first poem. The last 8 stanzas are all about music. This should be the title of this poem. This second poem is complete and is quite nice as it is. It still needs a little work but people will still enjoy it as it is. - Greenwolfe 1962



    Date & Time: 7/15/2010 9: 38: 00 PM
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    Poem: 23922601 - A calm river flow
    Member: Greenwolfe 1962
    Comment: There is some wisdom and some nice lines in this piece but it is much too long. It needs to be cut down a bit and the author needs to focus on some aspect of the river. This will force the writer to focus on the precise specific point he wants to make about the river. If he does this, the problems this poem carries with it will disappear. - Greenwolfe 1962

  • Gold Star - 26,227 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (7/15/2010 9:36:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 7/15/2010 9: 30: 00 PM
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    Poem: 23881339 - A day without charm
    Member: Roselyn Magbojos
    Comment: Let us get straight on the subject
    If apology is offered then not to reject
    It may amount to be greatness on our part
    Well it is nice gesture with very good start

    Then... I hope my apology will be accepted.

God, bless only those

I pray the God to shower bless
Who commit more sins and not less
Who are most wanted and dreaded
professional killer and guilty but not pleaded
God only bless those…….

I am feeble and also very weak,
Future not bright and look very bleak
I pledge and vow not to kill

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