hasmukh amathalal

(17/05/1947 / Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India)

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/28/2010 9:33:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 1/28/2010 9: 16: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21096246 - Woman's womb
    Member: Almedia Knight
    Comment: great honor to a Woman's womb, Hasmukh. Just as mother earth gives life to all forms and keep all forms in balance...without complaints. Women give life to human with love...just as mother earth give life to all forms but is often violated and or mistreated, like women. The creation story has placed man as the dominant power over all life form so, not until the present 'male' god is replaced or presented genderless, there will be little or no respect for the womb of mother earth or the womb of women. Nevertheless, mothers, lovers, and wives love our men just the same because we are the givers of life.

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/28/2010 6:57:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 1/28/2010 4: 37: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21096246 - Woman's womb
    Member: Ridha Abdellaoui
    Comment: Hello Hasmukh!
    I was surprised to see that you have about (439) poems. That means you are a proliferous poet. Frankly, I am not able to read all of them at the moment. I just start with 'Woman's womb'. In its theme it is well chosen for 'Woman is half a society' as we say in Tunisia.
    Here I would like to comment upon both the 'good' and the 'bad' points of your poem. First it is good to start your poem with the four opening questions:

    'Why woman is forced upon to bear a child? '
    'Is it because she is so gracious and mild? '
    'Is that whole universe is so proud of her stature? '
    'Is she paramount factor that she cares not for her future? '

    That is great to draw the attention of the Reader / Listener to your problematicity that will be solved throughout the intervening verses but please pay attention to the grammaticality of:

    'Why woman is forced upon to bear a child? '

    Please pay attention to the inversion rule in questioning. Many poets mis-interpret the poetic license which is another matter.
    In general your poem is of great value but there is the problem of 'Directness'. In poetry one should avoid that otherwise his / her 'poem' will lose its essence.
    Example:

    'No one should violate her modesty or simply dare'

    That looks like a legal order:

    'No driver should park here or dare'

    You see there is no difference between your verse and this prohibition sign!
    There are many other verses that should be re-formulated.
    Finally, this is but an opinion with all my respect and encouragement.

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/28/2010 11:13:00 AM)

    From : Vp Ramesan (India ;)
    To : Hasmukh Amathalal
    Date Time : 1/27/2010 11: 29: 00 PM (GMT -6: 00)


    Subject : comments

    Dear Hasmukh,

    Your concern for the Mother's womb you have to be answered by men all over the world. When religions all over the world chain the women and put her under the yoke of slavery and she is treated as a commodity to passify the lust of men there will be no end to her ordeals. You might have read the news that a sixteen year old girl from Bangladesh was impregnated my a man under the pretext that he will marry her. He was twenty. The village panchayat convened a meeting and slapped the punishment of 101 lashes by whip and threatened her family of being declared out caste and even expelled from the village in case the family is not amenable to the corporal punishment ordered by the Panchayat. The young man, the ravisher, was left scot-free. This is the very same situation in India there is a written constitution under which there is a legal system and Judiciary. Yet the politicians shut there eyes towards such heinous crimes against women. I exhort you gentle man to react sharply to such social evils emanated from religion. Congrats. I vote ten marks for you. Please visit my poems and offer me support with votes.

    Poet V.P.RAMESAN

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/26/2010 5:27:00 PM)

    ate & Time: 1/26/2010 8: 53: 00 AM

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    Poem: 21165338 - Joint family
    Member: Indira Renganathan
    Comment: Hats off to you Hasmukh...no one can beat you...excellent

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/25/2010 7:57:00 PM)

    Divorce has happened over just this very thing, Jadia, often! My mother once told my husband, NEVER stop dating your wife. When we're dating we see only the best of one another. Once the wooing is done and the vows said, the real person shines through. There's no more courtship that once made everything so much fun. It becomes too routine, and soon it depresses men and women to see where they are in life.
    Sure-fire way to keep spark and happiness is to always be aware of the emotions of one another and to always be respectful of those...
    This is a wonderful write of one that has a second chance...
    Enjoyed this!
    Glata

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/24/2010 6:09:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 1/23/2010 9: 02: 00 PM

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    Poem: 19017989 - Simple grace
    Member: Rinki Nandy
    Comment: Women are generally kind and very tolerant
    They remain very pleasant with quality inherent
    It is their powerful weapon and very essential
    To prove its worth with element so substantial

    your words describe us the best. so good to know that in this chauvinist world there exists a man who not only admits but appreciates a woman's beauty, lovely and eternal.10++++

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/23/2010 9:31:00 AM)

    ate & Time: 1/23/2010 7: 21: 00 AM

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    Poem: 21096246 - Woman's womb
    Member: Indira Renganathan
    Comment: Hasmukh, you are the best son of the Goddess of genesis....endless times I bow to you....with lots of thanks lots of 10s

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/23/2010 9:28:00 AM)

    te & Time: 1/23/2010 7: 23: 00 AM

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    Poem: 21121339 - Haiti
    Member: Merna Ibrahim
    Comment: Actually the human beings polluted and destroyed the nature, so we must protect the good left part and fix the bad part, like that we will build a foundation for a better future and for the next generations.According to the natural phenomenons, God'Almighty' is only the one who can control this affair.So God help them and forgive all of us...
    A long poem but it is really good and involves a strong and crucial messages..Merna

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/20/2010 10:32:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 1/20/2010 10: 24: 00 PM

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    Poem: 20958338 - Pleasantry exchanges
    Member: Antonio Liao
    Comment: If only the world will only listen and read this poem.....the fume of fire
    in every heart lost its scent...and the greed of power loosen its mind, down
    to emptiness of the soul.....prayer and wish this poem will be gone to every
    one's thirst of nothingness....God bless...a 10 Star of all poems...

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/20/2010 1:58:00 AM)

    ate & Time: 1/19/2010 11: 49: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21085528 - What is it to me
    Member: Yacov Mitchenko
    Comment: Actually, I enjoyed this poem more than most of your others. It is clearer, more focused, and the development of ideas is smoother. There's improvement in grammar and syntax. Yes, we need to walk alone and leave this earth a little more beautiful than it was without us. We need to proceed with the utmost passion and dedication, regardless of how well our efforts are received by others. Generally, the nobler the cause, the more ill will and resentment the individual provokes, often due to envy or to people's feeling threatened in some way. Thank you, sir.

I lived not

I lived not up to expectations
Thus raised distrust and many questions,
Had promised to keep words,
In the name of God and also Lords,

Promise is simple but after all promise,
To be observed till approach of demise,
Never to forget any and not to compromise,
Not to break any just to sprang surprise,

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