hasmukh amathalal

(17/05/1947 / Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India)

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (4/2/2010 11:21:00 PM)

    From : Apoet Bangla (India ;)

    To : Hasmukh Amathalal

    Date Time : 4/2/2010 6: 18: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00)


    Subject : RE: A live together.....

    poet, you have the inner-sight to look at the truth. This vision is very important to a poet and to an artist. This Singularity perhaps differentiate one from another. Your individual style of explaining the facts of life is interesting.
    Write more. Thank you
    prab.

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (4/2/2010 11:07:00 PM)

    From : Deborah Cameron (United States ;)

    To : Hasmukh Amathalal

    Date Time : 4/2/2010 1: 00: 00 PM (GMT -6: 00)


    Subject : Your poems

    Thank you for recommending your poems to me. You are a thoughtful wordsmith.

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (4/1/2010 6:53:00 AM)

    We are all different Jadia. That's what makes us unique.. I so loved this for it's honesty inside it. The way we have to sometimes hide who we are, yet the ones we hurt are ourselves. Letting others in and know who we are, our feelings, is always the best.. It is up to them to either like us and take us for who we are, or walk away..

    Another fine write here.

    Hugs,
    Moonie xx


    © MoonStar Rose

    Thu Apr 01,2010 11: 42

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (4/1/2010 6:20:00 AM)

    From : David Dale Kush (south bend United States; Male; 58)
    To : Hasmukh Amathalal
    Date Time : 4/1/2010 1: 07: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject : Re: dear sir

    we who write from the soul like yourself are always
    wonderful to reaqd keep up thegood work for I believe words can change the world my friend

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/27/2010 7:35:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 3/27/2010 9: 25: 00 AM

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    Poem: 21967348 - A dead end
    Member: Rajkumar Mukherjee
    Comment: Dear Hasmukhlalji,
    Thanks for your invite to read and rate your poem 'dead end'
    We are perhaps sailing in the same boat and as such our feelings match
    This is the time to introspect through our life's journey and share the profound knowledge with the younger generation.
    Your poem is a journeyin the same direction.
    The rhyming pattern of the poem is fine maintaining AA/BB pattern but no of lines you have exceeded the meter length.
    You can easily correct those by using a few imageriesor metaphors
    I find the meter counts of stanza 2 as most appropriate for this type of poem.
    A few friendly suggestion-
    1) S1 L2- a typo 'know' should bre 'known'
    2) S1 L 4 can be changed to 'no one may learn how much I succeded' This wil also create an inter-rhyming with third line.
    3) S 2 L 3 'AT' can be deleted as superflous.
    LIKED THE POEM. RATED HIGH
    Rajkumar

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/25/2010 2:03:00 AM)

    Poem: 21096246 - Woman's womb
    Member: Zafar Tahir
    Comment: Hasmukh gee adab:
    Same blood same thinking:
    Fist lesson we were tought was; there is heaven under the feet of mother:
    That is start and end of this worthy state of our being.

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/23/2010 7:34:00 AM)

    Poem: 21934573 - All answers
    Member: John Knight
    Comment: Hi Hasmukh - A very interesting and philosophic poem. V 1 Highlights the fact that 21st C Man is very materialistic and also very dissatisfied with what he has. V 2 The Holy Scriptures say 'Godliness with contentment is great gain'. V 3 We need to consider the situation of the AVERAGE MAN in the World. He has so litle compared with what we have in the UK. A comparison woulld soon make us 'Count our Blessings' for what we take for granted. V 4 A soft life erodes our resisitance and 'The moral fibre is lost'. V 5 In order to have less stress and a degree of mental peace we need to be less of the 'Now Generation' and take a long - term view. V 6 Ambition is a good thing - but it needs to be in persective. V 7 'Rejoice and participate in the thing in the natural way'. We need to take some risk - but we can't fly - remember Icarus. V 8 What great advice and what a great ending 'Doing what comes naturally'. Joy - self fulfillment - satisfaction - no pain - no rejection - So let it be.. Thanks for sharing. yours in poetry - JOHN.

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/21/2010 12:32:00 AM)

    Date & Time: 3/20/2010 9: 06: 00 PM

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    Poem: 17742708 - A place called
    Member: Bethany Williams
    Comment: Such beauty in a great poem. Great words used in this poem.. I had such a great time reading this....10+++

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/21/2010 12:30:00 AM)

    ate & Time: 3/20/2010 9: 22: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21897681 - A 'Papa, please'
    Member: Elna Mercado
    Comment: my eyes grow wider, my heart beats faster......my childhood....in your lines.....tears.....
    as a single mom, i consciously chosen not to do as it was in my childhood but i must confess, i did....the feeling was horrifying, hunting. i have written an apology to my son when he was 13.....waited for forgiveness.....when it did, gratefulness is so sweet...

    parenting is very difficult and i read you struggle with that too....when we go deeper within and recognize what is going through, it become our strength and guideline for change and /or modification what we can do for the next time...

    you write so vividly with emotions that move a reader.

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/19/2010 8:56:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 3/19/2010 1: 50: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21861341 - A trouble in offing
    Member: Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK
    Comment: ‘…Love is after all God’s gift and can’t be had at paying prize
    I accept it as simple divine shower and happily summarize ‘

    Fabulous finish … true Love now-a-days is as rare as pure Heart

    We’ve lost that heart and ….egoic [selfish] with preponderance of egotism… I’m the best …
    Before marrying or falling in love we must read good poems as primer to make us receptacle of Love
    10++

I lived not

I lived not up to expectations
Thus raised distrust and many questions,
Had promised to keep words,
In the name of God and also Lords,

Promise is simple but after all promise,
To be observed till approach of demise,
Never to forget any and not to compromise,
Not to break any just to sprang surprise,

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