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hasmukh amathalal

(17/05/1947 / Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India)

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/21/2010 12:30:00 AM)

    ate & Time: 3/20/2010 9: 22: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21897681 - A 'Papa, please'
    Member: Elna Mercado
    Comment: my eyes grow wider, my heart beats faster......my childhood....in your lines.....tears.....
    as a single mom, i consciously chosen not to do as it was in my childhood but i must confess, i did....the feeling was horrifying, hunting. i have written an apology to my son when he was 13.....waited for forgiveness.....when it did, gratefulness is so sweet...

    parenting is very difficult and i read you struggle with that too....when we go deeper within and recognize what is going through, it become our strength and guideline for change and /or modification what we can do for the next time...

    you write so vividly with emotions that move a reader.

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/19/2010 8:56:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 3/19/2010 1: 50: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21861341 - A trouble in offing
    Member: Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK
    Comment: ‘…Love is after all God’s gift and can’t be had at paying prize
    I accept it as simple divine shower and happily summarize ‘

    Fabulous finish … true Love now-a-days is as rare as pure Heart

    We’ve lost that heart and ….egoic [selfish] with preponderance of egotism… I’m the best …
    Before marrying or falling in love we must read good poems as primer to make us receptacle of Love
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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/19/2010 5:29:00 AM)

    Date & Time: 3/18/2010 7: 36: 00 AM

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    Poem: 21874612 - A different challenge
    Member: Will F. D. Blackman
    Comment: I liked the way you built on the notes
    played from line to line. Not all storytellers
    are poets but all poets are storytellers.
    A very fine job telling this one.

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/17/2010 8:24:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 3/17/2010 8: 22: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21874612 - A different challenge
    Member: Sridevi Datta
    Comment: Don’t cry for somebody’s action and fault
    It might have been insult and somersault
    You got to forget and brace for new lease of life
    You may prove very good mother and honored wife
    yes....at some point of time...we need to put our past behind us and stop blaming ourselves...that will liberate us in the real sense.

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/14/2010 11:52:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 3/11/2010 7: 06: 00 AM
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    Poem: 18181249 - Anywhere you like
    Member: Adnan Khalifeh
    Comment: Nice one........I like most of it........Especially:
    We exchanged so many pleasantries,
    No distance seemed between ocean and countries,
    Neither mountains, hills nor any boundaries,
    Eyes met and said to one another,
    Was it not necessary before we marry?
    He was hesitant for slight moment,
    I offered my self for holy deal,
    I was there for his wounds to heal,
    With only condition for him to be real,
    Waited for approval for the final seal
    ...................
    Yours truly,
    Adnan

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/14/2010 11:51:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 3/11/2010 8: 49: 00 AM
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    Poem: 21725273 - A 500th poem
    Member: John Knight
    Comment: Hi Hasmukh - Well done! ! 500 is a big bench mark - never attained in age but in some thinga attainable - 500 runs in cricket - 500 postage stamps in an album - 500 paintings and for some 5oo poems. But how - you ask - is this possible. Your own creative brain - yes - but also the one who held you - your family - your friends - you readers - your commentaters and last but not least GOD (V 7) . Without God we are nothing and can achieve nothing. I like the linguistic structure and the rhyme and the rhythm. The first six verses look back and the second six look forward to the 1000th. To continue (V 8) to flow freely (V 9) to find space
    (V 10) to strive hard (V 11) and to go with the natural flow (V 12) . Thanks for sharing - yours in Poetry - JOHN

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/14/2010 11:48:00 PM)

    ate & Time: 3/12/2010 3: 12: 00 AM
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    Poem: 21792387 - A Divine motherhood
    Member: Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK
    Comment: ‘Purtarthe Kryote Bharga’ [to get child men make wife] … as scripture says …

    Hindus believe... ‘Putt’ named door [in celestial journey of Atman] can’t be crossed unless posthumous rite done by Atmaja [comes from 2 souls] … to reach ones earned destination...

    The child born out of pure lust its called ‘Lustchild’ [LuC]… when it comes out of love its called ‘Lovechild’ [LoC]… may seem funny and bizarre how minus lust.how.. reproduction can be done…?

    It too answered in our scripture after becoming Awakened one if want carry forward the progeny [‘Purtarthe Kryote Bharga’] the sloka becomes contextually perfect …

    Life pattern and society have rolled like snow ball and become voluminous with relevancy befitting in a spatial way… various rules postulations..

    You’re poetry seems to me about ‘LoC …. To fillup the women with the joy of Motherhoodness [the final culmination] with minus lust have a child…

    Best facevalue of a woman found when she is breastfeeding her child…indeed … serene utopia … I’ve never seen such facevalue in any picture [even in most romantic] ….

    Our scripture cautioned us LoC born with high value… attributes but LuC … much much below and farrrrrrrrrrrrrr

    In Satya Yuga …. Average lifespan was about ten thousand years because of high quality [attributes values] population…and in Kali Yuga it has dwindled to about 100-125 years…

    10+
    Ms. Nivedita
    UK

    PS: ‘…It was no game of love or hate but simple act to react…’
    I humbly agree to disagree to this line Sir excuse me … it’ll give birth to Reactive Child [RC]..lolol... eclipsed out...
    n

  • Leila Taghavi (3/11/2010 5:04:00 AM)

    Yes, we should be realistic. Thanks for your poem.

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (2/23/2010 6:09:00 AM)

    Date & Time: 2/23/2010 2: 16: 00 AM
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    Poem: 21552083 - Child abuse
    Member: Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK
    Comment: Hmmm Human Rights! ! ...Is Phonic diarrhea! Conceptual Conception? [taking from my father’s poetry]…what you say as lip service...

    The most interesting point you wrote: ‘Why it is that flower which should see light of the day is simply crushed?

    This reminds me great essayist Sd. Mujtasba Ali [in Bengali] wrote we love children do we cut their head and décor vase? Why in flower we do it?


    A humane write for Human Rights scholastic indeed...
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    Ms. Nivedita

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (2/17/2010 10:06:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 2/17/2010 2: 57: 00 PM Remove this comment


    Poem: 21421052 - Diamonds are forever
    Member: John Knight

    Comment: Hi Hasmukh - Theis is a megapoem with very good rhytm and rhyme. I has good flow. V 1 Diamonds are a condensed form of carbon and are valuable because of their rarity - hardness - durability and lustre. It is magic jewel that has dazzled Kings - Knights - Knaves throughout human history. V 2 Diamonds represent wealth and stability and they are the greatest symbol of love between a man and a woman. V 3 Ladies are like diamonds - priceless and multifaceted. V 4 They glow with an inner light. V 5 Jewellry crafted with daimonds is always beautiful and alwys fashionable. V 6 Each diamomnd - like each lady - have an intrinsic beauty nothing can mar. V 7 Diamond is the hardest substance known to man. The moral is: Never mess witha woman! V 8 Never underestimate a woman - like a diamomnd her value increases day by day. An older woman brings experience to all circumastances! V 9 The depth of fire - in a diamond - is unfathamable. Likewise the depth of love and devotion is infinite compared with man's shallowness. V 10 Men forget and eliminate but (V 11) Ladies remember everything - know everything - can do everything - like diamonds their love and devotion is forever. God created Adam first - he looked at the product - rechecked and revised His blueprint and created woman - PERFECTION. Thanks for sharing - Yours in Poetry - JOHN.

I lived not

I lived not up to expectations
Thus raised distrust and many questions,
Had promised to keep words,
In the name of God and also Lords,

Promise is simple but after all promise,
To be observed till approach of demise,
Never to forget any and not to compromise,
Not to break any just to sprang surprise,

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