hmm. cheesy but good. like romantically cheesy but i dig it.
sounds lyrical. if you don't already, try to write a lyrical piece and i think you'd do well. I loved it. i'm in love with your piece and i'd love to use a poem or two in a song if you'd let me
very good writing friend. yes i called you friend, because all people who search to make the world better are my friend. keep it up trying to reform the poetic world.