thank you for giving me this chance to read your poems. I appreciate their emotional forthrightness, even as they feel to be conveyed with a technical naivete. At times, it feels as if the poems become too direct, too involved in reporting your situations directly from life; here, perhaps, developing some distance by working away from the 'I' of the first person, to, perhaps, the 'you' of the second person, or even 'he/she/it' of the third, can help, as I have found with my own work.
Please feel free to dropp me a line if ever you want a detailed critique. And if there is any way that I can help benefit you and your poetry.