A Cinderella Man Poem by Michael Vinicio Camacho Menéndez

A Cinderella Man

Rating: 3.0


I’m home alone at three am
The sound of silence blow out my brain
And look around is just the pain
This is how this story ends
There wasn’t light all now is dark
The broken heart of this poor guy
He found one day, his own soul mate
And he just thought…..well he just thought
He fell in love ……well he just fell
And never notice all was a game
This little boy was only playing
With his heart, soul and brain
And later then he realize
This entire joke around his heart
And in this moment the crystal’s shoes
In thousand pieces over the floor
He run away, didn’t turn back
His precious clothes is all wet now
And this joke just destroy
All around this naive boy
The happiness haven’t a point
Over this tale the faith is gone
And this is how this story ends
With my story: The disgrace of Cinderella Man.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Carike Klokow 06 February 2008

Hey hey. I can feel what u r trying to say with this poem but theres just not enough flow. Like words that rhyme etc. Also, try and and focus on your vocab. Where you put the words eg. 'There wasn’t light all now is dark', try, ' There wasn't light now everything is dark'. Just remember, example this sentence, u already said there wasnt light(now u repeating) now all is dark. So just read alot! The best advice i was ever given. Preferably english books if you wanna write in english. Keep it up. Thanx for the mail. xxx

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