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I wanted to dance with her.
If she had agreed—
oh, how sweet
to have held her in my arms,
to have felt her movement,
to have seen how her hair
lay against her neck.
Oh, it would have been nice
to have had those few minutes
to whisper, doubtful whether
the words would be heard
above the music—
to have watched her lips
form the words, to have seen
the look of mild exasperation
as the words fell unheard,
to have watched her smile
as we danced.
Oh, it would have been very nice.
Hanque O . . .
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Comments about this poem (A Dance not Danced
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Hanque O . . .
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Sonya Florentino (9/5/2009 8:47:00 PM)
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it would have been very nice indeed... but the way you wrote it with all the intricate details...it could very well have happened... but of course it didn't.... oh but why didn't it? ! ! bitter-sweet....
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Patti Masterman (8/12/2009 9:19:00 AM)
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With your grand imagination, I'm sure you could have went on and described the
entire evening. Your words just flow so beautifully. Really enjoyed this; could see every detail you included.
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Adeline Foster (8/5/2009 2:49:00 PM)
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Ah! How lovely. The whole poem has a breathless flavor. Well done.
Adeline
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Muhammad Ali (8/2/2009 8:18:00 AM)
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so dreamy, and beauty! !
lovely poem friend!
10..
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Paul Hansford (7/30/2009 11:32:00 AM)
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What-might-have-been is a rich vein of poetic inspiration. Very nicely done.
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Linda Hepner (7/13/2009 1:34:00 AM)
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This has to be set to music!
Linda H
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Paige S (5/24/2009 10:32:00 PM)
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Beautifully written piece! Very lovely and romantic.
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William Stoneberger (4/23/2009 6:14:00 PM)
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ah...the missed opportunity...a nice read...brings memories...
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Rayjean Carter (4/12/2009 2:48:00 PM)
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has a lot of desire in it. a nice poem.
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