A Dove And Crows Poem by Elena Sandu

meaningful...creative...talent remains unfed? ...10

What’s the criterion of your food to share? -The color of my feathers? -What color I shall dye them, pink! ? ! -The sound of my voice? -Should I be mute, you think? -Size? ! ? -Teach me! How can I shrink? ! -Is it my fault? -That I'm not cute -I can't enchant.. -Why? am I so unpleasant? And then, in chorus: -Why? ? ! ! ? ? What is the criterion! ! ! ! ! A very big question you are asking here.. very well thought out . you write about the descriminators philosophy.. very very nice. i liked it very much. go on writing. you hve great talent..

wow, what a beautiful poem, it's amazing how you capture the reader n draw a picture yet full with meanings.. great job it is! .

This is Inokashira koen? ? haha - a wild guess! Great poem! ! !

i plan to use this outstanding poem in my upcoming March 2019 showcase of PH poems. i've previously left comments and sent to MyPoemList. Thanks. bri (:

A brilliant poem brilliantly expressed bearing a great theme. Thanks for sharing.

Hi Elena, A very intriguing poem, with images galore, readily communicating with the reader. Loved reading. A few Indian thoughts on the poem: 1. giving a few crumbs/ a little food to the dove, while denying any to the crow, I take, as indicative of the Apartheid practice (keeping human beings separated/divided by the color of the skin) , which Gandhi, Nelson Mandela and Martin Luther King fought against, in different parts of the globe, in different points in time. Even today, in some parts of India, people are held untouchable in the name of caste and creed and color of the skin. 2) The reference to 'onighiri' (rice ball) : In India, as part of the remembrance of the dead, a ritual sraadhha is practiced every year on the anniversary of death, in which a ball of cooked rice is offered to the dead as part of the ritual. It is considered that the departed part-taken the offering, if crows consume the rice-ball. That much for the twin-image of rice ball and crows. A very intriguing poem.10

Elena, i've read the poem and some of the comments. this is, for me, a FANTASTIC poem. and i'm not just saying that because i love birds, oppose discrimination, and have a japanese wife. i copied down some lines as i went though the poem and will now comment on them. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - But as he seem..............make it seems - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Gets to be fed few crumbs this is a very interesting line in that i would put an a in front of few in order to indicate that food was given. it is true that, as written, the reader will understand that some crumbs were gotten by the birds, BUT to me, without a, the emphasis is on the quantity of crumbs gotten (a very small number of crumbs) rather than the fact that any food at all was gotten. i'm not sure i can make the difference (to me at least) understood by you or non-native english writers. of course there may be plenty of native-english-speaking people like me who would not thank the a is an improvement. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Starts yelling: ................i would write Start, not Starts since there are more than one crow starting. of course (!) there are times in english when a group of things (more than one thing) will be treated like a singe thing in writing sentences about the group. e.g. a herd of cows is more than several cows in a group, so i could write the herd [of cows] starts to run away. a group of crows can be called a mob so i could write the mob starts. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Teach me! How can I shrink? ! .............i LAUGHED a little at this line. of course it was NOT a laughing matter for the crows. nor is it for a little girl who is not very (or at all) attractive and hears someone say of another little girl she is so beautiful! . will the not-so-attractive girl ask how can i be beautiful? ........... well, here come the plastic surgeons, if the girl can afford it in adulthood! : ( - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Bento goes back inside the bags is there eastern european bento? - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - to answer questions they did not mind i wasn't sure if by they did not mind you meant the couple were not bothered by being asked the questions OR if you meant the couple did not heed/pay attention to the questions. my first impulse is to think of the first usage i mention, but there is the other way of using to mind. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - i hope the crows enjoyed the rice ball. a nice bit of humour/humor thrown in at the end. thanks. and there were a few rhymes as a bonus. did i tell you i thought the poem was fantastic; that's pretty darn good! thanks for sharing. now it is time for ME to get something to eat. bri :)

A thoughtful composition! I personally love crows!