Mohammad Akmal Nazir

Rookie - 5 Points (Bahraich, U.P. India)

*a Humble Complaint* - Poem by Mohammad Akmal Nazir

You could have been more polite observing me,
Your harsh words have left
An indelible impression,
Hatred can be won by love alone,
As one gets relief from
Scorching heat
By gentle rain,
As the sermon of a saint soothes
The disturbed mind,
Your words could have healed
The wounds of my heart,
For once you touched me, felt me,
And covered your being with my love,
As you said,
You smelt my love and called it red rose,
What's happened now?
Thorns have grown on my lips,
My being has become the grave of your hatred,
Is it a diversion
Or you're posing to be more sensible?


Comments about *a Humble Complaint* by Mohammad Akmal Nazir

  • Rookie - 15 Points Precia Liz (12/27/2014 8:20:00 AM)

    nice poem, i liked it... (Report) Reply

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  • Gold Star - 29,767 Points Akhtar Jawad (6/26/2014 6:25:00 AM)

    Nice idea, nice poem. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Bothwell T Murindagomo (4/9/2014 2:31:00 AM)

    Wow, wow. Love the way u have played with simple words but bringing out exactly what the heart is feeling. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Nyagaka Charles (1/7/2014 1:22:00 AM)

    real life...lovely piece. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Moses Olarotimi (2/29/2012 5:30:00 PM)

    Nice piece of creative intelligence. I envy u. Kip it coming (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Diamond Williams (1/10/2012 11:19:00 PM)

    B-E-A-U-T-I-F-U-L...WELL WRITTEN (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Eva Saldana (1/10/2012 7:22:00 PM)

    Exellent! ! :) i loved it. 10 (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Dickens Joseph Sawo (1/8/2012 6:07:00 PM)

    this poem reminds me of a saying in my country where your title means the same, i love its simplicity in words.wonderful poem with wise sentences. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Nadood Al Nasser (11/17/2011 1:49:00 PM)

    Beautiful and amazing. Well done my friend, u have just created a masterpiece! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 170 Points Marcus Mckinley (10/17/2011 12:18:00 PM)

    criticism is always hardest to take from someone you love.
    nicely written (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Scarlett Blades (10/10/2011 8:38:00 PM)

    Wow, very impressive! I love the way you describe things. Lovable! I rate it a perfect 10.: -) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Benjamin Dotse (10/7/2011 2:20:00 PM)

    Indeed this is a great poem.i dont even how to congratulate you
    this is a kind of situation which most lovers go through.your poem
    spoke to all of us who fall a victim to this situation.it not jyst a great poem but an excellent
    one.THUMBS UP (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points James Atil (9/19/2011 4:29:00 PM)

    Excellent! The emotion is there and I can see no reason to rate this 10.
    More power! Let's support each other in one way or another my friend...just visit my site www.poemhunter.com/jamesatil/ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Show Me The Glint Of Light On Broken Glass (8/23/2011 7:13:00 AM)

    I had to read it again...and yes I still love it as much as the first time read it.

    Thank you for posting such a wonderful poem
    Izzey (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 56 Points B. J. Ayers (8/22/2011 12:15:00 PM)

    A very nice write, indeed...I rate it a very strong 9.5
    B J Ayers (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 399 Points Almedia Knight-Oliver (8/8/2011 7:45:00 PM)

    A 'Humble Complaint' of a bitter-sweet love.Good write, Thanks for your comment about my poem. Keep writing about everday truths, but there're times when we can venture out into the universe (the light) and travel beneath the earth (darkness) both light and darkess give us both. Again, thanks for reading my poem! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 30 Points Ezediuno Louis Odinakaose (8/2/2011 6:40:00 AM)

    Thanks for reading my poem.
    I love yours, the title of one who is willing to give another chance.
    Your discriptive expressions shows flexible imagination and good use of words with smooth flow of language. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Chris Haifley (7/24/2011 10:04:00 AM)

    Such an amazing poem: D the emotions woven throughout it are great. Its so thought provoking. You never think that someone who loved you so much could also cause so much hate. I'm blown away (: keep on writing! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Stefanie Fontker (7/20/2011 7:57:00 PM)

    Great poem, nicely written. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 197 Points Spiritual Seeker (7/20/2011 4:04:00 AM)

    I keep repeating your poem, very humble, wise and deep indeed in feeling...congratulation..I rate it a great 10. Thnx for sharing. Kindly also read my poem'' Bring me to a far distant land''...TQ (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, November 27, 2010

Poem Edited: Wednesday, July 6, 2011


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