akram saqib

Rookie - 72 Points (14 APRIL / SAHIWAL)

A Humble Request - Poem by akram saqib

O the poet, the sensitive fellow
Minister of lyrics, sweet and mellow
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Seer for young and peer for old
Painter of moon and the sun gold
You depicted the worlds unseen
Shapes of people with brush keen
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Have you ever tried to take a look?
On dry tears that made a hook
Those blind eyes wanting in sight
Deprived of every single birth right
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In this world of lust and wealth
Are ever sick deprived of health
Have you tried to ever cast
A cursory look at his past
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Was he not like that child?
Who was tender innocent and mild?
Who grew old with silver spoon?
Who was able to play with moon?
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He grew old in such circumstances
That had not afford much instances
To become rich and opulent
Even opportunity was opponent
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Or his cast color and creed
Oblige him to be inferior breed
Or his nationality makes him so
That he is living only to bow
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Look around please and write something
That could toll and in the ears ring
Those who have monopolized earth
And are hungry to snatch mirth
? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?
? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?


Comments about A Humble Request by akram saqib

  • Rookie - 47 Points Meggie Gultiano (5/12/2009 6:29:00 AM)

    a very touching piece (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 40 Points Ashraful Musaddeq (5/11/2009 11:13:00 AM)

    Lovely, touchy poem with an appeal in the last stanza with a lot of? ?
    My 10 for it with love. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Chitra - (5/1/2009 10:03:00 AM)

    a deep cry for all the deprived souls..an earnest plea to the poet community to spread the word on these social atrocities (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 4 Points Ratnakar Rout (5/1/2009 7:45:00 AM)

    Dear Akram,
    A thought provoking and heart touching poem.This is an area to which people in affluence do not give any importance.Thank you for highlighting the miseries and woes of the people.please keep it up. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 3 Points Dr Hitesh Sheth (4/30/2009 12:44:00 PM)

    The cry of a heart which is unable to see the pain, sorrow and inequality and injustice in the world..................Good Write in rhymes............10+++........... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 3 Points Dr Hitesh Sheth (4/30/2009 12:43:00 PM)

    The cry of a heart which is unable to see the pain, sorrow and inequality and injustice in the world..................Good Write in rhymes............10+++........... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Amy (4/30/2009 12:19:00 PM)

    Everyone was right to give you all tens

    this is true talent (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 65 Points PERSIAN NIGHTINGALE (4/29/2009 12:59:00 PM)

    captivating piece, beautiful...thanks for sharing (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Elaine Oxamendi Vicet (4/29/2009 8:24:00 AM)

    A lot of mixed messages I read in this one..a carefree, careless world and the duty of the literay artist..as the job of the poet extends to all literary writers. You are right we capture and record the comings and goings of society but our work should not be as tombstones noting the passings or fantasies but must resonate loud and clear and articuate the path of a better way. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 8 Points Anjali Sinha (4/28/2009 7:49:00 AM)

    with so many question marks
    how can I be hungry to steal mirth
    whatever a lovely write dear akram (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 26 Points Rajaram Ramachandran (4/27/2009 8:36:00 PM)

    Socialism means equal distribution of wealth to all, but unfortunately today it means equal distribution of wants and not of wealth. Everyone is in wants, whether rich or poor. The sky is the limit for wants. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Sarah Childers (4/27/2009 7:16:00 PM)

    It was very interesting, but in a good way, it made you think. Though I thought some of the rhyming sounded forced, but it was still a very nice poem. I have never really written with rhyme because I always struggle to make ends meet. Keep up the good work!

    ~Cheers (Report) Reply

  • Rookie ~ Jon London ~ (4/27/2009 1:55:00 PM)

    Fantastic flows of poetic verse, dance along fizzy lines that bubble up with soul, nice penning (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 24 Points Yoonoos Peerbocus (4/27/2009 8:34:00 AM)

    interesting........................ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Naidz Ladia (4/27/2009 7:09:00 AM)

    this is nice to read becoz of its rhyming words, , the contents are also best fitted for the title..this is great..pleasant to the eyes of readers, ,
    naizz (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,327 Points Saadat Tahir (4/27/2009 6:38:00 AM)

    superb diction and clear fluid poem
    there is this rebellious streak here too

    but poets are after all sensitive thinking creatures that feed on the circumstance
    chew and brew...

    very very nice cheers...10 (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, April 27, 2009



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