A Moth’s Promise Poem by jathin aka jesuzz

This piece has a haunting, dreamlike quality not easy for a poet to achieve. Very well done Jathin.10 from me.

beautiful imagery---the promise of the moth to light a candle excellent write ----enjoyed it. anjali

jathin.......this poem is in a league of its own.........a master piece.....congrats! !

In the palanquin of Illusions Humble Love passed by, Holding the lantern the Four Bearers, the four brothers, Trust, Tears, Betrayal and Sorrow Stepped softly on the grass Green like the parrot's feather With envy for the daughter of beauty Who sat in the lap of Astrid, Hair in plaits, tied with gold ribbons, She gazed intently at the sky blue, Blue like her lips cold, in a rush She lifts her silver gown Dropped her jeweled crown She sailed away from the world Towards the shore, shore of love, Paddled with rapid strokes Red her hands she stopped The four brothers, Trust, Joy, Compassion and Devotion Four bearers of palanquin, She seeks to be Love's love With nothing but a promise Of a moth to a lit candle

...'In this silent moonlight shower Cutting your oars deep in the silver river Where do you sail? '... lines classic...you sail moon showered in your superb imaginative river...tantalising poem piece...10

In these eyes blinded by you God plays the second fiddle. ......................................... par excellence! i read kesav jee's poem and discovered he had written a sequel to a piece of yourz...im guessing this is it.. both his work and yours are exclusive and individually marvellous. this is the first time i've read a piece by you and i thorougly enjoyed it. excellent piece.

Amazing, it tells a story, and as always with your poems, description is wonderous.

Beautiful poem, , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , so well structured, , every line has a massege

A moth's promise and a mammoth writes..........indeed.Well done Jathin.

I enjoyed reading this with all of its imagery and contrasts. Very well done.