A Piece Of Ice Poem by Ahmad Shiddiqi

A Piece Of Ice

Rating: 4.3


I walk through snowy avenue
nobody there, just a glance of you
darling, when you realize what I am
to your life and to your freedom

I stop under corner lamps
they twinkle like Summer stars
darling, when you really miss me
into your love, I beg a chance's key

I stare at shadowy branches
they sway like ballerina's dances
darling, where you put your hope
suddenly I can't pull destiny's rope

I smile to eerie ravens
nothing else matters
darling, where you bury bravery
surprisingly I can't erase memory

to you I just a piece of ice
I melt in front of river's eyes
to you I just a piece of ice
I thaw under mountain's flames

to you, I just a piece of ice
I plunge inside sea breeze
to you, I just a piece of ice
I drown into dawn skies

(dedicated to a great poet at poemhunter, Merna Ibrahim)

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Kim Barney 03 December 2016

Congratulations on poem of the day! Well done!

3 0 Reply
Indira Renganathan 03 December 2016

Immense pleasure to see your poem here Ahmad....You are the first one to honour me too dedicating your poemMysterious Depth....You are highly talented....one proof is this poem...repetitive word darling and the icey ending lines make the reader say wow...congratulations on being the poet of the day..... God bless you

3 0 Reply
Bernard F. Asuncion 03 December 2016

I stop under corner lamps they twinkle like Summer stars darling, when you really miss me into your love, I beg a chance's key Nice poem... Congrats on being selected......

2 0 Reply
Nimal Dunuhinga 22 March 2009

A fine poem and it's cold!

2 0 Reply

loved the personification, nicely done! -Every rose starts out as an ash-Ashes 2 Roses :)

2 0 Reply
Bharati Nayak 03 December 2016

A great writing! ! A true lover always feel humbled at the greatness and beauty of the beloved. His heart is riddled with doubt whether his feelings reach to the heart of his love. The poem flows so beautifully- - - - - Congratulations for being Poet of the Day! !

0 0 Reply
Rajnish Manga 03 December 2016

The poem is a great tribute to a notable fellow poet and portrays her hallowed influence. It also merges nature with the poet's feelings quite beautifully. Thanks & Congrats- POTD. to you I just a piece of ice I thaw under mountain's flames

2 0 Reply
Seamus O Brian 03 December 2016

Just a piece of ice in your eyes, darling. What a terrifically haunting metaphor for looking into the eyes of the desired, and finding nothing but apathy; certainly one of the most distressing human experiences this life offers. You have captured that magnificently in these last 2 stanzas, dear poet. Bravo, indeed. I pray peace and grace into your journey, my friend, you and all the PH family, as we wander together down the lonely streets of snowy avenue.

2 0 Reply
Christina Simmons 03 December 2016

What a great way to look upon a whole, human being as an object: a hollow vessel that can easily be controlled, Just mere water: one click of the finger and all the bruising, ill feelings of treacherous circumstances could easily disappear without a second thought, instead of sticking like glue on our psyche. Well written, dear poet.

3 0 Reply
Akhtar Jawad 03 December 2016

A wonderful poem, congrats, a very good selection as members poem of the day.

3 0 Reply
READ THIS POEM IN OTHER LANGUAGES
Ahmad Shiddiqi

Ahmad Shiddiqi

Semarang, Central Java, Indonesia
Close
Error Success