A Rhyme Of A Beggar Poem by Ahmad Shiddiqi

A Rhyme Of A Beggar

Rating: 4.5


O reddish cloud!
in morning June
pour some waters
to this dry ocean

O ripe sky!
in evening March
pour some milk
to this empty valley

O young dove!
on golden tree
grab some love
from this slippery cliff

O purple cow!
on tranquil field
catch some care
from this hidden bungalow

a light in old fort
must be delight
a hope on a cup of tea
must be enough

a smile in a sparkling store
must be for awhile
a scent in a friendly tavern
must be tuneful

a silken glove on a glassy table
must be such tenderness
a white compass in a toy box
must be such happiness

(dedicated to a great poet at poemhunter, Louis Rams)

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Aldo Kraas 15 March 2009

So far this is one of your best poems

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Christina Phan 15 March 2009

wow all ur peoms are amazing gd job

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Ravi A 15 March 2009

A nice idea to present with apt similies but take care of Wren and Martin. 'Pours', 'Pours', 'Grabs', 'Catches' are to be replaced by Pour, pour, grab, catch since there is the sense of address in the first line of every stanza. 'A tuneful'. 'A' is unnecessary. Again, ' few tenderness', 'few happiness'. Few is quite unnecessary since tenderness and happiness cannot be quantified like numbers. 'Little' is okay. Thanks.

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Juan Carlos Abeti 16 March 2009

good one, nice t o read and enjoyable.

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A pleasing and pleasant flow that is both beautiful and refreshing.

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Sally Plumb Plumb 29 August 2010

I enjoyed this poem... loved the first four stanzas.

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Omar Ibrahim 24 June 2009

i admire your way of thinking and writing..............and i enjoy all your poem.... may ALLAH bless you........

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Sulaiman Mohd Yusof 26 May 2009

You're the beggar of hearts n souls.Masterful piece.

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Louis Rams 17 May 2009

AN HONOR BESTOWED UPON ME, WHICH I CAN NOT SEE, BUT YOU HAVE SET MY MIND FREE. APPARANTLY I AM THE WHITE COMPASS IN THE TOY BOX FOR I AM RICH IN HAPPINESS. THANK YOU

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Wistfully wishing asking for the out of reach things-life is such a tease! ! ! ! a ten from me....

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Ahmad Shiddiqi

Ahmad Shiddiqi

Semarang, Central Java, Indonesia
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