A Ruthless View Poem by Sean Joyce

A Ruthless View



I ran backwards for three weeks
just to see the way you smiled
Climbed the Seven Hills of Rome
to catch the echo of your voice

I passed you by on a cloud so high
and I caught the scent of your hair
From my aerial view saw a thing or two
but that’s not here nor there

I swam around the world today
and I watched as you waded in
but the ruthless view did not show you
so I swam away again

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Adeline Foster 24 June 2009

A Ruthless View Another great poem with unfortunate typos. What’s with those apostrophes in odd and funny places, I presume that they are to indicate that the I has been omitted but grammaticly a comma should do. And the “show you” should be on the end of the former line; same with the words 'or two'. Otherwise a wonderful poem that sings itself into ones mind. Adeline

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