Hezekiah Tiamiyu

Freshman - 554 Points (Lagos state, Nigeria)

A Thunderstorm - Poem by Hezekiah Tiamiyu

Whirling from the west,
Madly running without rest,
Sharply, all vests abreast.
Windvanes runs out to the test,
The wind is truly from the west.

As the wind sweeps along the paths,
Like a king trees bow as he pass.
Is this arrival not a world class?
Every lass the mighty tree has,
Falls as the wind proves his class.

The pregnant cloud takes her form,
Saying the pregnant cloud is set to born,
Once again a very mighty storm.
All white and yellow to black they turn.
Thence comes that heavy thunderstorm.

Darting in and out, madly.
Traders praying, 'Rain go away, ' sadly,
Children, out with their pants, happily,
Dancing, singing, 'Rain, rain fall heavily'
As the rain pours down madly.


Poet's Notes about The Poem

The poem gives us a picture of a storm....the activities of things related to a storm..... 'Lass' in line 8 means leaves.... Line 14 and 15 tells of d change in colour of d atmosphere.....

Comments about A Thunderstorm by Hezekiah Tiamiyu

  • Jasbir Chatterjee Jasbir Chatterjee (7/7/2014 5:39:00 PM)

    nice poem...I like the way it builds up to the climax towards the end... (Report) Reply

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  • Jayatissa K. Liyanage Jayatissa K. Liyanage (7/7/2014 3:36:00 AM)

    I like your metaphoric expressions particularly, in this poem. Nice write. (Report) Reply

  • David Wood David Wood (7/7/2013 6:32:00 AM)

    Well done on making member poet of the day, very good imagery used in your poem. (Report) Reply

  • Simon Odhiambo (7/11/2012 6:45:00 AM)

    Good use of imagery...I admire this so so so much. (Report) Reply

  • Karen Sinclair (7/7/2012 3:04:00 AM)

    Beautifully unusual...pregnant clouds and children engrossed in the weather, singing and dancing...lovely tyvm karen (Report) Reply

  • Anita Sehgal Anita Sehgal (7/7/2012 2:24:00 AM)

    mood for appreciating the beauty of the rains... well created (Report) Reply

  • Ken E Hall (7/5/2012 5:35:00 AM)

    A day when the clouds look grey and the thunder storms gather and the king trees bow...nice to read in your style...regards (Report) Reply

  • Unwritten Soul Unwritten Soul (7/3/2012 5:19:00 AM)

    You creating a rhythmic in a nice rhyme, it is another form than the first one i read, again you did a good job..The future still one of the different..i like both of these poem, keep it up for more_Unwritten Soul (Report) Reply

  • Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr (6/30/2012 4:53:00 PM)

    This has a nice rhyme scheme...Your structure needs some work so that each line will flow smoothly into the next.Hhowever, for the most part it is in synch, and I enjoyed the read...~FjR~. (Report) Reply

  • Neela Nath Das Neela Nath Das (6/30/2012 9:43:00 AM)

    Lovely picture of cloud as mother of rain.Wow! (Report) Reply

  • Madison Ann Madison Ann (6/30/2012 4:26:00 AM)

    Good poem_! Last part could use work (Report) Reply

  • Karen Sinclair (6/30/2012 4:25:00 AM)

    A lovely write in a traditional form.... enjoyable, well formed and I like that there is much thought in the structure...tyvm.. karen (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, June 30, 2012

Poem Edited: Thursday, December 20, 2012


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