I particularly enjoyed the image of the 'Sublime realities' dawning. For me the poem is about an insomniac, who starts having hallucinations, heads off to sleep, catches bits of sleep here and there and hopes to feel the sweet release of sleep. I could be wrong but thats my interpretation. Your style seems a little abrupt, each line is about a different subject matter rather than expanding on the line before it, not that thats a bad thing.
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I really like it, but i agree with the other comments, im confused by the message, its a vague, i do like it, it really isn't a critisism hell my 'poems' are truely awful! it is good but the message needs to be clearer!