jathin aka jesuzz

Rookie (23-dec-1987 / india)

A Vampire’s Dilemma


Motion eludes my conscience
Sublime realities dawn
Dark figures in the ocean
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  • Rookie - 773 Points Leslie Philibert (10/12/2013 8:09:00 AM)

    A good write, well done (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Anita Sehgal (10/12/2012 12:35:00 AM)

    dilemma well brought out.. powerful words.. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 3 Points Dr Hitesh Sheth (3/27/2009 10:39:00 PM)

    Hell! This is a love triangle
    Bare bodies of deceit
    Surround a soul elite................wonderful dilemma.........Good Write............ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 62 Points Kesav Easwaran (3/27/2009 2:21:00 AM)

    sleeping in daylight and hoping to live by the darkness of night...well, many human minds are vampire like...artful poetization of the theme inside...10 (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Salome Danuba (3/27/2009 1:42:00 AM)

    very strong verses I may say it is a love dilemma and with the line breadcrumbs lead to nowhere is the right words to describe how we feel lost and hopeless sometimes.. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Scott Daniels (3/26/2009 7:32:00 PM)

    I particularly enjoyed the image of the 'Sublime realities' dawning. For me the poem is about an insomniac, who starts having hallucinations, heads off to sleep, catches bits of sleep here and there and hopes to feel the sweet release of sleep. I could be wrong but thats my interpretation. Your style seems a little abrupt, each line is about a different subject matter rather than expanding on the line before it, not that thats a bad thing.
    Good stuff (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Sid John Gardner. (3/26/2009 11:44:00 AM)

    A complex but enjoyable poem...Well done Jathin,
    Sid. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Lynda Robson (3/26/2009 11:07:00 AM)

    A very innovative poem, well penned,

    10
    Lynda x (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Concetta Neville (3/26/2009 10:56:00 AM)

    I really enjoyed reading this. Great job. Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Chitra - (3/26/2009 9:01:00 AM)

    very creative, imaginative...a different theme... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 190 Points Seema Chowdhury (3/26/2009 7:38:00 AM)

    one more day to hope......lovely. very nice and imaginative poem. keep up the good work. take care (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 8 Points Anjali Sinha (3/26/2009 12:04:00 AM)

    wowwwwwwww
    the virgin silence succumbs
    beautiful phrases and great imagery
    -10 anjali (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Dhanesh Aradhye (3/25/2009 11:40:00 PM)

    nice flow... very njoying is the way u hv written it down... :) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie James Nall (3/25/2009 9:29:00 PM)

    I gave you a 10 for the surrealistic picture you painted.Try my Kann Abels Restuarant And Walking in Twilight, let me know your thoughts. Also, if you read My Angel, print it for Mothers Day if you like, thanx (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Nagourta (3/25/2009 9:08:00 PM)

    Whoever said a vampyre does not dream?

    Kindov sick of the vampyre movement personally, but this was good after it's fashion. I liked the imagery regarding the bubble the most. It was well said. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Lt Feitosa (3/25/2009 7:41:00 PM)

    Nice poem, very creative! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sandy Vanity (3/25/2009 7:35:00 PM)

    nice poem i like it its very expressive and shows alot (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Rosalita Fernandez (3/25/2009 6:56:00 PM)

    I really like it, but i agree with the other comments, im confused by the message, its a vague, i do like it, it really isn't a critisism hell my 'poems' are truely awful! it is good but the message needs to be clearer! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Jerry Abrahamson (3/25/2009 6:54:00 PM)

    Nice poem. Very to the point. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Christina Phan (3/25/2009 6:49:00 PM)

    I luv it
    what messages you are sending?
    I dont get it
    its was great
    8+
    its kind of scared and mystery (Report) Reply



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