Suzette Richards

Rookie - 30 Points (Cape Town, SOUTH AFRICA)

Albatross


Like an albatross,
Past clings like dross.
Round my bent neck
it hangs in check
by my golden cross.

Standards from long ago;
culture difficult to forego -
I strive to survive
just the daily jive
of struggles to and fro.

I pull out the rusty nail
of old doctrines which impale
the coffin of my life.
Objections are rife,
but my soul isn't for sale.

Submitted: Sunday, April 22, 2012
Edited: Tuesday, June 05, 2012

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This poem was written as the epitaph to my book, Water Dance. It sums up the philosophy and the wisdom gained, as described in the said book: (www.waterdancesusbooks.webs.com)

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  • Rookie - 30 Points Suzette Richards (6/1/2012 2:20:00 AM)

    I wrote this poem in imitation of the rap culture (the use of the word jive giving a clue to this): with a mix of the old fashioned rhyming style of poetry. The tone of the poem was meant to irritate; hence the closing lines:
    I pull out the rusty nail
    of old doctrines which impale
    the coffin of my life. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie William F Dougherty (5/31/2012 7:46:00 PM)

    Golden Rule: The Sound Must Seem an Echo to the Sense.
    Poem is trying to say something worth saying, but is hedged in by the short
    lines, which necessarily over-emphasis the rhymes.
    Solution: adapt rhyme scheme to alternative lines.
    DrBill (Report) Reply

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