An Attempt At Ars Poetica Poem by Souren Mondal

An Attempt At Ars Poetica

Rating: 5.0


no rhyme
no rhythm
just fragmented thoughts
caught mid air in a net
and bottled up in a cage
where the circus ringmaster
with a whip of whimsical arbitariness
tames them down
and parades them in a somewhat meaningful pattern

disciplined unruly curs

hoping that the camouflage is good enough
for them to be considered

deceptive enough to be called a poem or
something


ars poetica

an experiment at taming down
unwanted thoughts

a mere experiment into verbalising scattered
nightmares

no metre
no syllable counts or forms

just words meaningless horrible words
that contradict each other
laid down upon a white sheet of paper

one that might have been more useful
in making at least twelve cigarette joints

souren mondal
6.2.16

Friday, February 5, 2016
Topic(s) of this poem: poetry
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
To be honest with it, this is an experimental poem at best, and pseudo-intellectual bullshit at worst. When I entered this site, I was like a young kid with no idea about how to write a poem, but with a simple aim of writing whatever I can, so that I can help myself fight my mental illness. I was not really 'brave', but more like inexperienced and clueless.. But now, after more than half a year out here, I cannot really say that I belong to the 'inexperienced' category of poets. But, if I make an analogy, when I came here I was a kid who ran around and did whatever he wanted; but now I am more like an awkward teenager with a face full of pimples! I cannot go and play with the kids because I am 'too old' for that, and at the same time, I cannot go and join the elders, because I am 'too young' for that.. Poetic puberty sucks! !

Souren Mondal
February 6,2016
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Savita Tyagi 09 February 2016

You have shown an excellent ability to collect your fragmented thoughts and turn them into a fine composition. What starts as a revolt in heart becomes a touching expression so impressive. Thank you for sharing this lovely poem.

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Souren Mondal 10 February 2016

It is exactly the same spirit as you described that goes into a composition of a poem from me.. The thoughts are always there, it is just that there is a struggle to shape them into something that I can call a poem.. The only thing is, if someone asked me - 'What is a poem? ' - I would perhaps have no answers for that! ! And here lies the beauty of poetry..

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Kelly Kurt 06 February 2016

This piece has grandfathered you, Souren. I wonder sometimes if you are my long lost little brother. Twelve joints might inspire many more poems but this one is a masterpiece of art, philosophy, intellect and literature. Very well done.

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Souren Mondal 06 February 2016

Thank you very much Kelly.. I feel the same.. Our skepticism, religious and political views, alongside our zest for Vodka, and perhaps a little cynicism covering our hurt selves at the miserable state of humanity are really signs of it.. If I ever met you someday, I am certain to have a discussion about life and a few beers down first before we talk poetry.. Thanks for being a companion in my poetic journey brother and friend..

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Susan Williams 12 April 2016

I hate to say this given the poet's note about his own poem, but I liked how you wrote it, how you presented an idea about how poetry might be written and how it shouldn't be written. Yet I'm sure there were people who wanted to silence e e cummings for dribbling words down a page for visual impact a la a leaf falls done so much better his way. My personal progress is to read the classics, study the classics, try to write a poem like the classic and then sit down and write my way and watch the old and new blend together after a while and create a new thing of beauty.[if I am fortunate]

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Barry Middleton 17 March 2016

Poetry is a broad topic. Poetry is as large as the universe. I believe both Horace and Archibald MacLeish would consider this to be good poetry.

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Neela Nath Das 16 February 2016

Yes Souren.I loved it.Write more.

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Soul Watcher 16 February 2016

I liked it, waiting to read more by you Souren. I liked your diction.

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M Asim Nehal 14 February 2016

Your first attempt is fantastic..........................10++++

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Souren Mondal 14 February 2016

Thank you very much Asim - :)

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