An Attempt At Haiku Poem by Lauren Michaels

An Attempt At Haiku

Rating: 5.0


A dichotomy
My skin, pale like my mother
Flushed like My father.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Marc Mannheimer 25 October 2007

That rocked! (Oy vey, they want 20 or more characters for my comment, how can you be sincere and terse when you're given a quota?)

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Donall Dempsey 19 May 2007

Not an attempt.. it is an...is! Rename it Haiku.. You've done what you set out to and done it very well...precise...concise...and turning on a sixpence. Says all it has to say in the best possible way. Very well observed and very well executed. Lovel the use of the word dichotomy to cover the first five syllables...never thought I would see it used so well and so cleverly. More? Please! love Donall

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Ernest Mayer 27 June 2006

gotta agree with goldy.

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Goldy Locks 14 May 2006

well done, Lauren. an attempt? i say a nail. so much said here in 17 syllables.

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