Looking Up. (July 15,1999 / Barinas)

Great poem. Keep wrighting and posting.

This is a well constructed piece of poetry/prose. I think you could be great at writing prose. More like story form. For one at (13) years old, this is a fabulous talented writer. Continue on with your writing dear friend. Someday in the not too distant future you will be a well known poetess. my dear.

loved your poems very tallented. remember your poems are personal thoughts that u allow us to read. thank you i think your very good

I'd highly rate 'Empty Soul' as a poem but I'd be much more optimistic myself about being enriched spiritually by embarking on self discovery.

Good structure and form and a sustained piece of writing with some well constructed language, well done.

Great writing from one so young (only 13) with a clever use of words, unexpectedly used at times. Very constructive

I love love this poem! ! ! you did such a good job :) you are very talented keep writing! .

A well thought out and constructed poem. Great expression - 'an empty mine as a goal'.

You can write like this at thirteen? The rest of us should be very worried. I am going to add you to 'my friends' so that I may find you quickly, I am writing tonight but I will be back soon.

Tears in eyes, grieving mind and soul
Penning simople words from his heart
Little he knows, The best of us in whole
By looking up, I see him as God's own art