Ancient Struggle Poem by Carolyn Brunelle

Ancient Struggle

Rating: 4.9


Another age old story
seventeen years of nurturing
yearns to be free.

A sense of entitlement reigns,
not a particularly new game
just an eternal rite of passage.

Little angel
you have grown strong, bold;
your heart dismissive and cold.
Where are you going?

Once a babe in our arms
now distant; so disarming,
a little girl no more
storms out the door....

Where are you taking our hearts?

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Eden Hurley 23 July 2008

that is an excellent poem. i would offer some more commentary but i am slightly lacking in that area, whereas you seem to be quite gifted. i'm sure this slightly off-topic and rant-like comment will suffice. all the best! please check out my new poem, i think you'll like it but who knows? maybe i've used up my creativity for the week.

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James B. Earley 23 July 2008

A necessary part of the learning processes.......yet we fret.....for experience says pain is lurking.....just around the corner!

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Rose Oldman 23 July 2008

Yes, it IS an ongoing struggle of the young, coming of age. Great poem!

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Kelvin Owusu 16 December 2012

an excellent piece of poetry, nicely written

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Savita Tyagi 16 December 2012

Lovely poem. it seems to me this struggle has become more prominent in todays world. Love the last line.

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Kim Barney 16 December 2014

Great poem and fitting title. Wonderfully expressed.

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John Richter 16 December 2014

An age old story..... Losing a child at adulthood is harder than raising them

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Aftab Alam Khursheed 16 December 2014

Abrupt so abrupt- Where are you taking our hearts? very nice- congrats

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Brian Johnston 22 December 2013

Makes me wish I had a child to write poems about...Bon Voyage. A definite 10! I'll definitely back for more. For a different take on a childless life still worth living check me out Carolyn.

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Kim Wood 17 December 2013

Wow, I'm going through this struggle right now Carolyn. I never read something that was so close to the issue before. A lot of people don't really discuss what its like to have a child that used to admire you, love to be around you, then become 17 and a stranger that doesn't seem to have any desire to be around me at all. I didn't realize how much it would affect me. I guess I'm not the only one.

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