Andy Poem by AURORA BANNECKJ

Andy

Rating: 2.7


i was so stuck when i first saw u
it was so bad i didn't know Wat to do
it seemed u wanted to know me more
with how u looked how could i say no
u were nice and very sweet
even though i was just a girl from the street
you took a huge toll on me
and it took only one day to see all your good qualities
to you i gave my trust and you never broke it
when i left i was sad
now that we talk again it makes me smile
you seem to still have an effect one me
if only you could truly see
i can't help but smile when we talk
i really missed u alot
I'm glad we are back in contact
and i truly mean that
you helped me with math
and we grew a bond
i was sad to leave cuz it's been to long.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Cain XXX 16 June 2010

how cute. this poem is really sweet. :)

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John Knight 11 June 2010

Hi Aurora - love the poem - it is an excellent example of a narrative poem and it has good rhythm and good rhyme. Don't worry about the spelling and grammar Angel - I understood the message and that is what is important - a good message is more important than 'Harvard' spelling and 'Yale' grammar (don't tell Johnny Navarro I said that! ! ! !) It is great (these days) when we can meet someone we can trust. We can all learn something from each other and someone who can help us with MATH is like GOD! ! ! ! ! ! Often poeple (who we really like) move in and out of our lives - just accept it Angel - its natural. Thanks for sharing - Love thru Poetry - JOHN - LOL.

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Manolo Del Toro 10 June 2010

It's nice to be in love. But as to the poem you need to be grammatically correct and check your spelling. Other than that it is ok.

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Adam Reed 10 June 2010

it sounds like you are in love and its complicated. it always is :) im happy you found someone like that. never lose contact with them :)

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