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i was so stuck when i first saw u
it was so bad i didn't know Wat to do
it seemed u wanted to know me more
with how u looked how could i say no
u were nice and very sweet
even though i was just a girl from the street
you took a huge toll on me
and it took only one day to see all your good qualities
to you i gave my trust and you never broke it
when i left i was sad
now that we talk again it makes me smile
you seem to still have an effect one me
if only you could truly see
i can't help but smile when we talk
i really missed u alot
I'm glad we are back in contact
and i truly mean that
you helped me with math
and we grew a bond
i was sad to leave cuz it's been to long.

Comments about Andy by AURORA BANNECKJ

  • Rookie Cain XXX (6/16/2010 7:38:00 AM)

    how cute. this poem is really sweet. :) (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie John Knight (6/11/2010 5:01:00 PM)

    Hi Aurora - love the poem - it is an excellent example of a narrative poem and it has good rhythm and good rhyme. Don't worry about the spelling and grammar Angel - I understood the message and that is what is important - a good message is more important than 'Harvard' spelling and 'Yale' grammar (don't tell Johnny Navarro I said that! ! ! !) It is great (these days) when we can meet someone we can trust. We can all learn something from each other and someone who can help us with MATH is like GOD! ! ! ! ! ! Often poeple (who we really like) move in and out of our lives - just accept it Angel - its natural. Thanks for sharing - Love thru Poetry - JOHN - LOL. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Johnny Navarro (6/10/2010 4:06:00 PM)

    It's nice to be in love. But as to the poem you need to be grammatically correct and check your spelling. Other than that it is ok. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 6 Points Adam Reed (6/10/2010 12:52:00 PM)

    it sounds like you are in love and its complicated. it always is :) im happy you found someone like that. never lose contact with them :) (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, June 9, 2010

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