*****(Be A Man) ***** Poem by krissi b'williams

*****(Be A Man) *****

Rating: 3.5


reliviling all, that you said
rereading the words
over n over, in my head
TRYING TO UNDERSTAND? ? ? ?
how i ever fell for a boy, who now i see is no man! ! ! !
trying again to understand
exactly what you were trying to say
in this 'DEAR JANE ' note
you so cowardly wrote
that you left behind...when you ran away....

'even though i love you...love is just not enough...
i only figured this out, when times started to get tough...
everything that was just so once simple, and easy too...
between us, between me n you...
just changed, n what i felt about you n me
and our life, and reality'

well, hell...
heres my response, i will not write it in a letter
i'll take another approach and make it even better...
i'll show up at your job, or at your new place...
i wont write my feelings in a note, but sat em to your face...
you cowardly disgrace....toal waste...
in very simple, easy, slow words, your inapt brain might understand
'if your such the coward, and was looking for a way out...whatever kinda way
just to leave me...n walk away
all you ever had to say'

do you understand? ? ? now
just step up and be a man! ! ! ! some how
not a coward, hiding behind, a 'DEAR JANE' note..
just speak it, not leave with a letter a child couldve wrote...
i DONT want some1, who cannot finish what they began...
and stating the obvious..you are no way near A MAN
a mans who is true..would of talked things over between me n you
b4 he left, goodness you are dense

'he would never shrug, shake their head
give maybes, possibilities as answers, instead
he, (A MAN) , would have been straight, and talked about
why exactly he needed to leave, what could never be worked out...
not hidind behind, a facade of lies
waiting 4 the cowards moment to leave without a goobye
except from the DEAR JANE not that you wrote
he would of said, everything he loved, hated and or began to dread
let it all out, and talked about
all the thoughts inside his head

JUST BE A MAN..IS THAT SIMPLE ENOUGH TO UNDERSTAND
hiding behind that cowardly note...a DEAR JANE LETTER
with 9 lines you wrote, couldnt have you done better
BOYS WILL BE BOYS, AND MEN WILL BE MEN
TELL ME EXACTLY, WHERE DO YOU FIT IN? ? ? ?

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Jazmin M. Baird 05 July 2009

I really like this poem very nicely done! ! ! ! Umm..did you get your emotions out? ?

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Lady Grace 05 July 2009

this is very long to read..but its ok..this letter is my gosh..maybe youre so young..coz you cant fix still your feelings...you can recognize if she/he is still a boy or a full grown..you can detect it..you can..and if you want my advice, then just let him what he'she will do..just let him so that he would know the proper on how to show love or care..he will know that..

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Priya Arora 05 July 2009

he, (A MAN) , would have been straight, and talked about why exactly he needed to leave, what could never be worked out... Awesome krissi...i simply love your poetry specially this poem in which you jot down 'Be a Man'..If you can't stand by your commetments..your words..and inspite of facing the fact you are finding the reasons to leave without saying goodbye..by disgracing this pious relation let me know where do you fit..awesome..Man is one who can stand by his words..his commitments..his decisions..awsome sweetheart..your write can give inspiration to servral grls around that in case some guy dont stand by his commitmnets and dare to take them for graned..then don't sit ideal..hit back and make them clear..by the way you expressed your thoughts.. Thanks for sharing)

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Olympia Melone 11 December 2009

you need a good man..10s

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Teresa Babson 29 September 2009

boys will be boys and men will be men

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a beautiful way of telling a story...

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Sulaiman Mohd Yusof 10 July 2009

A man would talk right to your face rather than hiding behind the bush.An awe inspiring poem you have got here Krissi.Good job dear!

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reliviling all, that you said rereading the words over n over, in my head TRYING TO UNDERSTAND? ? ? ? sad to believe all this... it is retracing steps that pinches us more in life.. very embrassing too...10 read mine mary to marry and, miss i miss you along with cowardice act

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