Ana L Alvarado

Bitter Sweet - Poem by Ana L Alvarado

I was once in love with a glorius love.
This desire was beyond me, addicted to the touch, the lips that would soon brake every bit of hope.
I use to hate that this control over me was much more stronger then what i had of myself.
Soon this love broke me took every bit of my will left me to die in pain.

Topic(s) of this poem: love

Comments about Bitter Sweet by Ana L Alvarado

  • Gold Star - 56,421 Points Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr (4/23/2015 2:34:00 AM)

    I like the the storyline which exudes stark passion...Have you ever considered structuring your work by employing stanzas, rather than in paragraph format which is more prosaic in appearance and can be difficult for Readers to take in as you meant for them to....Remember, we should always right so that our audience will read our work the same way as we would recite it to them in person...You have creative flair, and IMO, much potential to maximize...When you get a chance, read some Contemporary poetry, and you will see what I mean regarding structure, as well as employing punctuation in key areas of your poems, so that(once again) your audience will be treated to a mellifluous read by a talented quiller...Keep that pen pumping and...Good Luck, Ana~FjR~ (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, April 23, 2015

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