'Bon Voyage, Bottle' ........ [journey Of A Roadside-Tossed Bottle; Water Pollution] Poem by Bri Edwards

'Bon Voyage, Bottle' ........ [journey Of A Roadside-Tossed Bottle; Water Pollution]

Rating: 5.0


Stopping by the drug store
she bought six-pack of drink,
took back to children, four,
and set it by the sink.

Next day the teenage son
grabbed ONE as he went out
to pal around for fun,
skateboarding with a shout.

Down the hill, to downtown,
long hair flying high,
he drank the water down,
and dropped the empty with a sigh.

The bottle rolled to the curb
and sat there for a week,
in a middle-class suburb,
not far from a nearby creek.

A wind came up one night,
and then a sudden gust
took the bottle that was light
and tossed it like a speck of dust......

into a big vacant lot
(filled with trash and weeds) ....
onto a sandy spot.
[In the bottle bugs stored seeds.]

Then one day a tomboy,
wandering through the lot,
thought at first ‘twas a toy,
then said “what have I got? ”

Ants were still inside
guarding the precious food.
She cut it open wide,
and dumped out ants; how rude!

She dumped seeds as well,
and took bottle to the creek.
The day was hot as Hell.
There, a smoke she did sneak.

She dipped the bottle in creek water,
poured it on her feet.
The water, pleasure brought her;
it was a cooling treat.

Care-less, she left the bottle
when off to home she went.
Nearby a duck did waddle.
Another day was spent.

Three weeks passed on by,
and Bottle sat like a bum.
Then clouds formed in the sky,
and a rain storm did soon come.

The creek level did swell,
scouring rocky shore.
The bottle now fell;
its stay had been a bore.

Down the creek it washed
towards San Francisco Bay.
Bottle did get squashed,
but continued on its way.

(January 2013)

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
i made a lot of little changes in this eleven months after writing it, including changing 'toward' to 'towards' in the last stanza. but first i checked online and read that the two words are 'completely interchangeable'. i think 'towards' sounds better with 'San Fransisco', don't YOU?
i used to live in a location similar to the one in the poem; i did at the time of writing it. but i DON'T skateboard, and RARELY have bought bottled water. i may have been prompted to write this after noticing a plastic water bottle discarded and in a creek or along a curb (in which case i sometimes would retrieve it and toss into a recycling bin) .
this is different than a lot of my poems. many of them have much longer lines, and i usually try to fit some humor/humour into them (at least a little bit) . hope you appreciate this 'sad' story. is 'Bottle' off to the great 'pool of plastic' swirling around in the Pacific Ocean? ? : (
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bharati Nayak 05 February 2022

A great poem --The plastic bottle made its continued journey towards San Fransisco Bay! Our carelessness may one day make a sea of plastics only and there will be no places for fish, snails or any other living being.A funny poem with a powerful message

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Bri Edwards 04 May 2023

thanks, Bharati. THIS isn't my best 'work'. : ) bri

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Bri Edwards 04 May 2023

ihanks to all commenters

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Noreen Carden 05 December 2013

Hi Bri i like this saga about the bottle and its journey.I agree towards sounds better with San Fransisco

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Bri Edwards 06 January 2024

Stunning, FANTASTIC, SENSATIONAL, MIND-BLOWING, LIFE-CHANGING, BEYOND-WORDS, & NOT BAD to 'boot'! ! ! ! ! ! ***** And TO MY 'favorites'. : ) Read by a disinterested reader.

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Bharati Nayak 06 January 2024

A five star poem.But I wonder why such a beautiful poem has not yet been chosen Poem of the Day, though it has been there for ten years!

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Bharati Nayak 06 January 2024

Using less and less plastic, segregating plastics from biodegradable substances and recycling the plastics can put less burden on environment.But who listens?

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Bri says I had posted a comment here. But I am unable to find it! Anyways a beautiful poem, taking a sharp look at everyday human life. Not just the journey of the bottle. Great rhyme scheme. And inimitable Briite sarcasm.. Top score

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Bharati Nayak 04 May 2023

Yes Bri, this is one of your best poems I have enjoyed reading every time I come across this poem.

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Bri Edwards 05 May 2023

thanks again. i just saw notice, in 'Notifications', of your repeat visit and comment. : )

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