Bounded By Wings Poem by jim hogg

Bounded By Wings

Rating: 5.0


Love is a dancing of very small things
Or river of madness without release -
A starburst of moments bounded by wings

That carry us; an exquisite disease
We greedily suffer its blissful ache
Or river of madness without release

It's a serenade and the vows we make
In the heart of the storm, the dread of loss
We greedily suffer its blissful ache

And borne by love there's no gulf we can't cross
All that it brings seems especially true
In the heart of the storm, the dread of loss

An answering call that's suddenly through
Under our radar and under our skin
All that it brings seems especially true

In eyes that can't hide the smiling within
Love is a dancing of very small things
Under our radar and under our skin -
A starburst of moments bounded by wings


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Wednesday, December 14, 2011
Topic(s) of this poem: love
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Dave Walker 14 December 2011

A really beautiful poem, a great write.

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Iris Blue 14 March 2012

The form you have chosen for this poem is perfect simply because it combines the freedom of thought with the rigidness of structure and in so doing reinforces the juxtaposition created in the title. The first five stanza’s flow beautifully with their interlocked rhymes and the repitition of the second line of each just unravels the thought process further. The final quatrain creates a resounding echo which is both memorable and thought provoking. I think you’ve even managed to maintain the iambic pentameter throughout…an exceptional terzanelle and one I'd love to hear recited...

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William F Dougherty 26 April 2012

Credit this villanelle in terza rima to a true (poeta) maker.

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William F Dougherty 24 October 2012

On second reading: writing a villanelle with sufficient skill to conceal labor transformed to ease is an enviable feat of unbounded, unrippled flight.

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S. Wesley Mcgranor 07 January 2024

'What goes up must come down'.

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jim hogg 13 January 2024

Thanks for your 'down to earth' comment S W Mcg, though it maybe assumes too much about the escape velocity of love, potentially a mistake of no little gravity...Though I fear you're probably right - on this planet anyway.

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Just Lines 26 May 2018

I love this...as impressive, if not more so, on successive reads...just going to have to try and deconstruct it in order to figure out how you nailed this form so I can attempt to write my own terzanelle...think I may be bounded by a lack of creativity though...

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Linda Ori 30 October 2015

Delicious write, as always, Jim. We suffer much in the name of love, but it is the one thing we all crave, and would do anything to find. Lovely read........glad to see you here once again!

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F J Thomas 13 August 2014

An exquisite disease...yes it is isn't it :) I enjoyed your word play here Jim. I'm finding many are shying away from it b/c of bullies here confusing English lessons with poetry. A person who believes that every piece of true poetry has to be formatted the way a standard sentence is does not have an accurate understanding of poetry and is devoid of any meaningful emotion with the exception of bitterness. Your poem is lovely :)

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Iris Blue 02 April 2014

Just revisiting as this is one of my favourites of yours...and second time round I'm even more moved..and inspired too to attempt writing something in this form. thanks for this one Jim...

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