Breath Poem by Kelsea Osterman

Breath

Rating: 5.0


Stop telling me to just
breath.
I am so tired of it.
You think I need your help.
Well guess again.
I don't need you or anything
you want to give me.
I can help myself.
I can live on my own.
I don't need you to
hold my hand and walk
me to end of the tunnel.
I can breath on my own so go.
Go away, go, far, away.
I know you just want to help.
But I don't want it.
None, of it, nothing.
Do you got that?
I don't need anything from you at all.
So now are you going
to let me breath on my own.
Because I can.
I can breath all on my own.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Iron Panda 23™ 04 March 2010

the tone in this is GREAT! ! (still wish i could rate option would go past 10) -_-

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Peter Vector 10 November 2009

Independence is important, how would we grow up without it? At sometime they have to sever the ties between us and them, because in the real world it's just us right, at least that's the way I see it... I love this poem because it rings true here and now, I just want them to let me free, is that so much to ask? I rate would rate this as priceless, but since that's not an option I'll just put 10.

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That's actually quite inspiring. I like the underlying anger put forth. It sounds to me like the person has done you wrong, but somehow I feel, underneath it all, it's written a little in denial. I know I have said things just to make myself believe them, 'cause they weren't true. But I think I could learn from your poem. If I could feel that I could make it on my own...

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Ying Escalona 10 November 2009

breath..very important...if we forget it...that's the end :)

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