Call 911 Poem by Roshana Phillips

Call 911

Rating: 5.0


Hi, Hello!
Someone, Anyone,
Please call 911.
For a heart has just gone to live on the other side,
Now, since it has committed suicide.

Beaten and broken;
She traverse the days.
Living every moment now;
Living as though she didn't care.

Feeling comfort in
The things that causes her discomfort.
As she endures the ache,
She no longer can take.

Someone please call 911
Because to her heart,
She have tied a shot gun
That had surely blow.
Now her appearance she no longer wants to show.

Friday, April 7, 2017
Topic(s) of this poem: love and loss
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Alexander Egbe Onoja 12 May 2017

I like ur vision and message. Same thing happened to a friend of mine, n she just told Me of it today. Although she wasn't with a gun, I felt a bit of the sadness she felt. Thanks for sharing... Keep it up.

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Bernard F. Asuncion 02 May 2017

Reminds me of the song BAD MEDICINE popularized by BON JOVI... I woul like also to mention LOVE ME BACK TO LIFE, also by BON JOVI, one of my fave bands.... you have penned an amazing poem.... a perfect 10, Roshana....

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Roshana Phillips 02 May 2017

Thank you Bernard F. Asuncion

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Unwritten Soul 02 May 2017

We need a surgeon that able to operate her emotion and a nurse to put her mind stronger...911 is outside in inside.. Good idea to write Roshana

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Roshana Phillips 02 May 2017

thank you Unwritten Soul

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Georgina Murray 02 May 2017

Again, another good piece with strong imagery....this one definitely needs a bit more tidying up on some of the lines though. I would be happy to help out if you'd would like? I am at work now, but I'd would be happy to help in a few hours if you want? Glad you contacted me as many of my unfinished pieces have similar themes (by that I mean I have experienced what it can get like on the mental/emotional pain front also)

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Roshana Phillips 02 May 2017

i hear you

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