Chocolate And Rain Poem by Sana Olivia Hernandez

Chocolate And Rain



After a long day,
Of sadness and pain.
It is only appropriate,
To end it with rain.

And after the cold rain,
It's important to smile,
And eat chocolate.
Despite the weight gain.

Up goes the rain.
Down goes the chocolate.
The rain puts you down,
But the chocolate picks me up.

And to combine the two?
What would that mean to you?
Disgusting calories?
And a nasty rainy day?

Your perspective alone,
Could make or break your day.

Bitter chocolate,
Sweet rain.
What does this mean to you?
Pleasure or pain?

To me it's all the same.
Innocent indulgence,
Impressive scenery.
The combination of the two,
Is heavenly to me.

-SOH

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
I'd like to thank Mr.Daniel Brick for suggesting I switch 'Sweet chocolate, Bitter rain' to 'bitter chocolate, sweet rain' It was a great idea. Thank you!
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bri Edwards 01 June 2014

interesting on several accounts. i tend to point out things to poets which seem wrong or odd to me in a poem. did you know that one of your lines does NOT start with a capital letter? on purpose? Your perspective alone, Could make or break your day. i like that you don't shy from using different numbers of lines in some of your stanzas; i do that once in a great while. yes, perspective could make or break a day, so to speak, but who always has control over their perspective? ? with rain, being a drought-stricken farmer or gardener could affect ones perspective! sure enough.......not too much rain at once please. in part of the poem it seems to be implied, if not said, that rain is a downer, but towards the end i think you are saying that you like it, along with chocolates. or at least whoever is 'speaking' enjoys it [impressive scenery? ]. thanks for sharing. bri :)

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Daniel Brick 01 June 2014

I was drawn by the title to want to read this poem. It's a surprising and provocative pairing because the words are so far apart but we can sense the poem is going to connect them for us. And it does - and along the way pulls in other connections. I think the key line is THE COMBINATION OF THE TWO IS HEAVENLY TO ME. I sensed that combination in blue drops with the blending of rain/tear drops, color/climate, outer/inner weather. You can say anything you want about these things, because the poetry is there in your perception they belong together. I also liked the parallel statement: SWEET CHOCOLATE/BITTER RAIN. But what if you added a stanza dealing with BITTER CHOCOLATE/SWEET RAIN? That could be another heavenly combination.

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