Loraine Lotter

Rookie (South Africa)

Cinderella - Poem by Loraine Lotter

If my name was Cinderella
You could be the prince
I could wear my sparkling prom dress
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Comments about Cinderella by Loraine Lotter

  • Rookie - 60 Points Evangeline Eva (1/4/2015 12:41:00 PM)

    Ok..this is realy realy great! Congratulations! I loved it and it remined me the feeling of being in love... (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 37 Points Jeremy Ryan (8/27/2014 12:01:00 AM)

    A tight story. Well written because of its sharp point! I like it. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 72 Points Sharilynn Reaser (8/20/2014 3:47:00 AM)

    That's so sweet! It reminds me of what it's like to be young, going to church dances, hearing those songs that made you die/melt inside and the whole starry eyed magical experience of it and, what was for me, youthful crushes! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 39 Points Rameen Shahid (8/12/2014 6:50:00 PM)

    But I can’t breathe, whenever you’re with me.
    Can you feel my heartbeat in my chest
    It’s getting faster every second
    two different things...but overall its great! :) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Joseph Sanchez (4/28/2014 11:09:00 AM)

    But I can’t breathe, whenever you’re with me.

    Can you feel my heartbeat in my chest
    It’s getting faster every second
    Time slows down, you are better than the best
    But would you feel the same
    If my name was Cinderella (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sarah Gordon (10/15/2013 2:37:00 PM)

    love it! ! ! ! ! you worked hard on it (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Holly Dvergsten (3/11/2013 11:42:00 AM)

    overall the poem is good, however the first stanza is a little rough
    HD period 4 (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Angela Bahareva (2/7/2013 1:58:00 PM)

    It sounds like great lyrics to a song (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Monet Al-amin (6/7/2012 5:03:00 PM)

    Love it! Written beautifully! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Taylor Cullen (3/19/2012 7:00:00 PM)

    Love it! ! ! ! It was beautiful to read! ! ! ! (Report) Reply








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