persian khushi

Rookie - 120 Points (kashmir)

Crash Bang - Poem by persian khushi

Speed!
Weathered
Slippery roads
High speed
Popped a wheel
Tyre burst
Screech driver shocked
Trying to stabilize the car
Breaks screech
Screams from side-walk
Collision
Pile up crash-crash
Glass shattered scattered
Screams squashed fleas
Running feet
Police sirens
Ambulance
Cars stopping
Check out this metal mess
1,2,3 car pile-up crash
Painful moans
Face bashed
In smashed windscreen
Nose broken
Blood oozing
H-e-l-p!
Petrol running
Race against time
Bystanders praying
Rescue workers
Jaws of life!


Poet's Notes about The Poem

02/10/12

Comments about Crash Bang by persian khushi

  • Rookie - 133 Points Allemagne Roßmann (10/7/2012 4:23:00 PM)

    1,2,3 car pile-up crash------great metaphors in those simple lines, a lot conveyed in brevity (Report) Reply

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  • Freshman - 835 Points Harindhar Reddy (10/3/2012 2:08:00 PM)

    Hello Poe'TESS, Marvelous display of words! I jotted many poems with words making sounds of cracking sound when our teeth break chocolate. I wonder how you emulated here. however, hope yr car journey ends safe....... With due respect......... H***
    Glass shattered scattered Screams squashed fleas sounds well. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 20 Points Yoonoos Peerbocus (10/3/2012 6:33:00 AM)

    jaws of life-nice inversion of -jaws of death/interestingly set (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, October 3, 2012



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