Vijay Sai

Rookie - 356 Points (30 12 1975 / Trichy, South India)

Crippled Dreams - Poem by Vijay Sai

I was rear, and by the window
She was front, and by the aisle
I saw her reflection
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Comments about Crippled Dreams by Vijay Sai

  • Soumita Sarkar Soumita Sarkar (11/25/2013 6:43:00 AM)

    When fantasy touches the reality.......this can happen but not always...Good narration and unexpected twist...I invite you to read my lines.Thanks. (Report) Reply

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  • Soumita Sarkar Soumita Sarkar (11/25/2013 6:41:00 AM)

    When the rock solid reality touches our floating dreams they do become crippled BUT not all.........nice poem....I invite you to Read my writes.Thanks. (Report) Reply

  • Tanja Bulovic (8/31/2013 1:00:00 PM)

    Very well written. The ending was unexpected. (Report) Reply

  • Geetha Jayakumar Geetha Jayakumar (8/21/2013 6:46:00 AM)

    Beautiful poem.. Each line is so beautifully portrayed...I loved it... Plus 10
    Everyday I will come to read your poems one by one... (Report) Reply

  • Kanniappan Kanniappan Kanniappan Kanniappan (6/20/2013 12:48:00 AM)

    The poem itself reveals everything, hence the detailed verse is not necessary.
    I studied in Manipal, Udipi and Mangalore during 1961 -68 where the girls were very beautiful, but since that area was endemic for filariasis, a very few may be suffering from elephantiasis leg. (Report) Reply

  • Sashka Salvatore Sashka Salvatore (5/26/2013 7:59:00 AM)

    I have just finished reading each poem of yours and this is the one that has truly captured my imagination :) (Report) Reply

  • Louis Cecile Louis Cecile (4/11/2013 1:53:00 AM)

    This is an excellently woven poem with good pacing and imagery. I particularly like the use of lightening as a metaphor as the sudden and randomness of it fits well with the overall story. (Report) Reply

  • Miss Molu (1/19/2013 5:50:00 AM)

    very vividly described :)
    such a pleasure to read (Report) Reply

  • Titi Dale Titi Dale (1/19/2013 2:42:00 AM)

    Wow, great explanation and description! Very nice :) keep writing: P (Report) Reply

  • Bri Edwards Bri Edwards (12/30/2012 12:29:00 AM)

    though i was not thrilled by this poem, i did enjoy what you were expressing. i did not understand it completely until i read your explanation. i DO NOT agree with joe hughes' comments below. i certainly enjoy a poem which i understand without added explanation, but poemhunter does provide a separate place to write the poem's story and i am glad of it. i always write something in the story box. my wife says i just like to talk/type. BUT sometimes a little mystery can be a good thing in a poem.
    i DO believe joe h. wrote punish instead of publish in his comment. perhaps he should not submit a comment until he proofreads, reproofreads, and reproofreads! thnks for sharing.
    p.s. i DO partly agree with joe, in that i have found that poems i have written and ignored for a while can easily get better' in my opinion when i edit them, adding or subtracting here and there. (Report) Reply

  • Bri Edwards Bri Edwards (12/30/2012 12:27:00 AM)

    oops! i reproofread too late to see i left an A out of.....thanks.....for sharing....in my comment below. (Report) Reply

  • Bri Edwards Bri Edwards (12/30/2012 12:23:00 AM)

    though i was not thrilled by this poem, i did enjoy what you were expressing. i did not understand it completely until i read your explanation. i DO NOT agree with joe hughes' comments below. i certainly enjoy a poem which i understand without added explanation, but poemhunter does provide a separate place to write the poem's story and i am glad of it. i always write something in the story box. my wife says i just like to talk/type. BUT sometimes a little mystery can be a good thing in a poem.
    i DO believe joe h. wrote punish instead of publish in his comment. perhaps he should not submit a comment until he proofreads, reproofreads, and reproofreads! thnks for sharing.
    p.s. i DO partly agree with joe, in that i have found that poems i have written and ignored for a while can easily get better' in my opinion when i edit them, adding or subtracting here and there. (Report) Reply

  • Frank (popeye) Pulver Frank (popeye) Pulver (10/8/2012 2:59:00 PM)

    Vijay, I am glad that you described your poem, because some people can see what your words are decsribing or trying to say. I really loved your poem. (Report) Reply

  • Subrat Pradhan Love-immortal Subrat Pradhan Love-immortal (9/3/2012 1:30:00 AM)

    well written but cutting short ur thoughts not reflecting full. try my love poems which u have not studied before. (Report) Reply

  • Uguru-okorie Joseph Uguru-okorie Joseph (4/18/2012 10:45:00 PM)

    Its beautiful and outstanding. Love it. (Report) Reply

  • Anne Achayo Anne Achayo (6/30/2010 3:34:00 AM)

    Extremely superb.... (Report) Reply

  • majid Alsaady (6/22/2010 1:21:00 PM)

    it is always nice to read vijay sai for the vivid lively pictures and the clever dealings
    it is not the girl who is crippled but the notion of the guy.the poet is telling us it is always a failure to fly in dreams forgetting the real life.thanks vijay (Report) Reply

  • Kaitlin Ivey (5/22/2010 5:52:00 PM)

    i have to say...this is amazing. Thank you so much for emailing me. I'm so inspired by writing just like you. (Report) Reply

  • Michael Brock (4/21/2010 8:22:00 AM)

    It is sad that we see things as you say in desire and dreams, when the reality is far different. We cannot make reality and dream one. The moment lost and we are the jetsam of the experience.

    Well written and it flow is very good.
    You have a way with words and using them visually.
    thanks for sharing
    Michael (Report) Reply

  • Corey Threet (10/6/2009 7:32:00 AM)

    Really powerful, it shows a real irony in a realistic situation. Confused by the well-being of such a beautiful girl the boy realized no one is perfect. Excellent poem thank you for sharing and remember. SpreadYourself! ! ! !

    ~Xeniyah (Report) Reply










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