Crushed Poem by Theodora (Theo) Onken
Crushed
The silence - it simply deafens
Only, do i hear my pounding heart
As you walk out of my lifetime-this day
...As you look to make- -a brand new start.
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Tell me is she everything that i wasn't?
Are her eyes - yet a deeper shade of blue?
Does her caress carry you to 'heavenly heights'
.................................And Beyond?
.....The way my touch used to do?
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Emptiness is all that i have left to hold
Now that you have left my side.....
All alone in the once after-glow of love
.............................Once shared
Too soon, you will take a brand new bride.
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Will she be everything i wasn't?
.....Will she make you feel forever whole?
Will she carry you to 'Heaven & Beyond'?
.....Will she become a part of your broken soul?
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By, Theodora Onken
November 23, 2016
I, too, am glad to know that this was fictional. Thanks for including the poet's note. So many times I have had to comment on similar poems without knowing if they were fictional or not. This is very well done, by the way. Your imagination did you proud, as they say.
Thank you so much Kim for your wonderful words. It is, indeed, quite and honor coming from a poet of your high caliber! Yes, many of my writes are fictional unless state otherwise. Again, Thank You! !
Glad to know this is fictional. Bu yor imagination then is vivid and awesome Sth I don't have since I can only wrie realities I have witnessed or experienced. The rhyming ballad is fabulously done and content appealing. Portrays jilted love so well wowwww. I hardly rate bu this I do 10. Great to read from u again. Hope u will my latest too titled ashurah.
Thank you Zaynub for reading my words and commenting. I truly appreciate your taking the time. Was beginning to think i needed to stop posting as no one seems to want to read or comment on my work any more. Anyway, thank you again. i will go read your poem ashurah.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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4/25/2024 11:27:19 AM # 1.0.0.1119
You really captured that sense of What-is-wrong-with-me that happens when the man follows his wandering eyes and...other body parts. You captured that intense pain and loneliness and jealousy that entangles the deserted woman who unfortunately was still in love. Why oh why can't people fall out of love at the same exact moment- - what a mountain of emotional debacles would be avoided by such excellent organization. I thought that your poetic skills are unleashed on this poem with exceptional results. Well-done, Theo, well done. 10++++++++