Cupid's Rainbow Poem by Lorraine Margueritte Gasrel Black

Cupid's Rainbow

Rating: 5.0


Leaving rainbows in my sleep
Only vision softly creeps
Venus slain to rise again
To share the light and quell the pain

Stardust shimmers like the past
Prisms shattered or everlast
Evasive whispers in my heart
Carves the image my soul imparts

Voices chime in dreams of glass
The future in the hour cast
Immortal as time's frailty
Unending with mortality

And in the dust the diamond makes
Within my heart reverie wakes
Alone you haunt, your essence chase
With the Sun the Moon is chaste

In the mind illusions dwell
Only the heart will clearly tell
Better my love to you before
Glows the morrow even more.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Brianne Lindline 07 October 2008

nice 10 from me.....

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Sarwar Chowdhury 08 October 2008

fine composition with nice ryhm/rythm......10+

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Ron Schmidt 08 October 2008

I find your poems to be inspiring and I know that I will learn so much from reading them. Thank you! 10+++

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Sathyanarayana M V S 09 October 2008

Mild, mellowed with so many beautiful rhymes, similies and metaphors...a great composition..............10

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Vanish Windows 10 October 2008

Lovely dreamy sounds in this! I'm not a fan of rhyme unless it has reason and here it works. This is the first of your poems that I've read and I shall come back for more.

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John Knight 12 September 2009

Hi Lorraine - A nicely constructed poem! So many poems on PH lack Form - Metre - Rhyme so it is lovely to find a poem that has all three. A lovely subject (that we can all relate to) and five balanced quatrains. You maintain the a a b b pattern of rhyme throughout but you are not 'rhyme led' and include some delicate 'half rhymes' glass - cast and internal rhymes which help the flow (Venus slain to rise again) . The metre is good throughout. I believe one criterion of a good poem is its recitability - yours is excellent. Do you agree that Poetry is meant not only to be read but also recited - Poetry Readings are very cathartic! I love your poem because it is both positive and optimistic - so many of the posted poems are POESIE NOIRE! Your similes are wonderful - Rianbows - Venus - Stardust - Prisms - Diamonds - Sun & Moon - etc. The last two lines are beautiful 'Better my love to you before - Glows the morrow even more'. I have been married 51 years so I can empathise. I must score it MAX - Yours in poetry - John

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Cj Heck 05 August 2009

What a joy your work is... soft, flowing, and so real. Warmest regards, CJ Heck

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Myrtle Thomas 19 February 2009

I read your biography it was very inspiring.I love the rainbow poem I wish I could do that.I have only been writing for a few months but I truly love it. A big 10 for you.

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Laurie Hill 25 January 2009

Deep and captivating......10

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Ashraful Musaddeq 26 October 2008

Lovely poem. Love it. 10 for it.

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