So lovely!
Winking at me brightly
On this dreary mid-October day
Their white petals and golden eyes
Make it seem they've lost their way
From a sunny and cheerful summer's day
Everything else is dark and gloomy
But these daisies nodding over
Remind me that one day
Despite the drizzle and the rain
Summer will arrive again
Gino, ya don't need/want? the That at start of last line. see what i mean? are you SURE someone shouldn't kill bri? ? :) - - - - - - - - - - - - - Bri's FORM FOR COMMENTING ON POEMS: [n/a = not applicable to this poem] Poem Comment Form As my shoulder I did abuse, here is what may amuse: A poem-comment “form”; I know it ain’t the norm. But if I write comments TOO long, I’ll never hear the end of the song: “Bri, I Told You, Take Care Of Shoulder; You’re Young No More & Getting Older”. So this simple form I have devised. Don’t look at me! Are you so surprised? If I use the form I MAY have more time … to read more poems with, or without, rhyme. After all, I can’t read and NOT comment, and if you must have MORE input ……….from me … send me a request ……….., though “more” AIN’T free. A. I enjoyed it: Yes _x__ ; No___ ; I’m not telling___ B. I understood it: Yes_x__; No___; I’m not sure___ C. I enjoyed the: Rhyming ___; Rhythm___; Originality___; Cleverness__x_; Humor/Humour___; Seriousness__x_; Sensuality___; Humanity___; Alliterations___; Personal touch_x_; Other ____poet's note______ D. It makes me want to read more of your poems: Yes_x__; No___; I’m not telling___ E. The use of English was: Impeccable/good_(see above) __; Deplorable/bad___; In between___; No comment___ F. Could use proofreading: Yes___; No___; You decide_x__ THANKS FOR SHARING. bri :)
... Remind me that one day Despite the drizzle and the rain That summer will arise again. Very hopeful! Well done, Eugene!
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A treasure! ! ! The daisies are so well described- winking at me brightly, - -their golden eyes- -nodding over. You show us how descriptions should be written- -by action, by inference, by words so perfectly chosen nothing else will do. Has this ever been Poem of the Day? ? ? ? If not, it should have. A 10 of course. I would like to read this poem at least once a week- for its innate beauty and as a reminder of how poems should be written.