What small hands pointing at the placard, I note,
while noting towered labiates of smoke clouds: abrupt.
Sun run on & on & on,
finally finding finality in a pair of small hands, cupped.
(CONT.) Labiates reminds me of the in female human anatomy. : 'The (SG: labium) are the major externally visible portions of the .' Yes, referred to as 'lips'. bri : )
PLACARD: 'placard plăk′ärd″, -ərd noun A sign or notice for display in a public place. A small card or plaque, such as a nameplate on a door.'
line 2: I might use 'towering'. I like the alliterations in 'finally finding finality'. (cont.)
(cont.) re 'finally finding finality': alliteration: 'the repetition of usually initial consonant sounds in two or more neighboring words or syllables (such as wild and woolly, threatening throngs) called also head rhyme, initial rhyme ' I never heard 'head rhyme' or 'initial rhyme'.
(cont.) Please don't 'let' the definitions of 'dalliance' keep you from expanding your poem. 'Expansion' may well be good for the poem. bri ;)
Kyle, as promised: 'dalliance dăl′ē-əns noun Casual romantic or sexual activity. A casual or brief romantic or sexual relationship. A brief involvement or interest in something.'.....
re the title: 'dalliance dăl′ē-əns noun Casual romantic or sexual activity. A casual or brief romantic or sexual relationship. A brief involvement or interest in something.' It's an 'interesting-but-not-clear, for me, poem'. Thanks for sharing. : ) Welcome 'New Poet' to PH. bri
I wonder if the pointing hands in line one are the same hands as the cupped hands in line 4. Hm? And who do they belong to?
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
LABIATES: 'adjective Having lips or liplike parts. Having or characterizing flowers with the corolla divided into liplike parts. Of or belonging to the mint family.