Defeating Gilgamesh Poem by Daniel Brick

Defeating Gilgamesh

Rating: 5.0


It wasn't difficultdefeating
Gilgamesh. He is Lord of Uruk
no longer, his kingship in ruins,
no champion has arisen, not in the city
nor in the vast rugged plains circling it.
Once he fought his own battles, wrestling,
crushing, stabbing. Now he slinks down
with a weary sigh. Of his gory what remains?
Words... Words carved in stone, words
pressed into clay tables, words recorded
by historians, and, rarely, words spoken
passionately, spontaneously, preserved
in a chamber of your heart...
It wasn't difficult. Everywhere you turn
there are people selling services and things.
No one notices an old warrior or two, dragging
his clanking armor behind him. I saw a man alone,
in a pale blue jumpsuit, hunched for hours
his wheel chair, that blob was once occupied
by the spirit of Gilgamesh. The spirit left
its imprint on this man, you know he was once
a king, but now he is a man of memories,
they are immortal and weightless...
It wasn't difficult: a deep breath exhaled
and he totters; strike him with a furry reed
and he cowers. Defeat no longer troubles him,
victory will not elate him. Pieces of his greatness
clutter the room, they are scattered on the floor.
People passing by might examine a piece or two,
then disgard them. But my soul knows better.

Sunday, February 9, 2020
Topic(s) of this poem: hero,history
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Liza Sudina 17 February 2020

Daniel, while reading this poem I enriched my vocabulary with many words! Slink, totter, cower, clutter, furry. Blob - do you mean zero? Disgard in the end - do you mean disregard? And gory - you mean? Or you meant glory? As for the meaning - under the king - is it you yourself or is it an image of slackening society? Impressive picture anyway! Goes deep into my heart!

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Glen Kappy 17 February 2020

back from the exercycle and from the i-pad to this desktop computer to read your new postings, daniel. interestingly on this one, my mind went to our contemporary veterans before i read your lines referencing one; the comparison is natural and poignant. couple of things, in the 8th line you mean " glory, " yes? also, i notice " clanking armor" is anachronistic next to what follows. -glen

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Soran M. H 09 February 2020

well done very fine poem and excellent language addressing very unique history of mankind it deserves 10++thanks for sharing

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Daniel Brick 12 February 2020

Thanks for the 10+ It's so wonderful to have a Poetry Peer evaluate my poems. It's a joy within to read your appreciation, just as my comments on your poems show how deeply your writing reaches to my soul.

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