Deja Vu Poem by ONElia AVElar
Deja Vu
While....................................walking
on the street............................today
i saw my features.............imprinted
on an elder................woman`s face
like simple......................copy-paste
of nose, ......................cheek-bones,
eyebrows, ........................my mouth
....................................heart-shaped
on a barely.............crumpled sheet,
walking past...................each other
long seconds of...glance exchange
Encounter.......like.............a deja vu.
Was..... I.... a ghost to her........then;
coming from her past life, .......too? ....
Sofia, the 13. June 2008
Wow! This is a fantastic poem and so well done. Beautiful and touching. Love the way you have set it out so the dots become the intervals between footsteps and thoughts and suggest the dislocation encountered in the encounter. You handled it so well and this is one of your most accomplished poems. I award you the highest accolade I can...I am jealous and wish that I had wrote it. Powerful poem...powerful! One of the most wonderful ones you have done. A bravo poem. I bow to your power and realise I am not worthy. love Donall Donall
That imagine came from the past because not the mirror but an interior voice told it. That voice that took our dear Onelia to the way of the experimental style. And now where is it taking her?
As imaginitive as always, One. Perhaps you have been cloned and somewhere there is someone writing equally striking poems. I doubt it. there is only one One. Fx
There is a sense of déjà vu in my adding comments to this poem again. But then, as poets, we live our lives - so to speak - in a form of reverse. The imagery here is unavoidably incisive. Rgds, Ivan
Good idea on the form and the visual effect.....much more to do in that formula...explore it in the future
My 10 for this coz it is a poem with a different form. Love it.
Very perceptive.I gave you a ten.Good direct composition.
You've woven a net of splendid deja vu.You've a unique style too.Thank you for sharing such wonderful verses
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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4/24/2024 7:03:02 PM # 1.0.0.1119
Oh wow, this is very clever! I love the way you've placed your words, it works to perfection. And I am a great believer in reincarnation so this is top in my book... Brilliant! HG: -) xx